Killing the Dream

Killing the Dream

A Poem by A LaDy NaMeD D

It was the oddest thing

to watch death

flash before my eyes

the truth he so creatively

intertwined with lies

as he held me

his eyes never letting me leave

his voice

slowly...

slowly

killing me

as he killed the dream

*killed the dream?*

Yes he killed the dream

murdered it

he stabbed it in the back

cut open it's throat

slit its wrist

and then adding insult to injury

sealed it with a kiss

the sadistic m**********r

that yes...i was in love with

killed the dream

killed my dream

and i..helpless..

could only watch

 

© 2010 A LaDy NaMeD D


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That was beautiful and painful at the same time. Odd combination but exactly what I got out of it... when something so heartfelt as a dream is involved, it seems like emotions just flow harder than ever. I really felt this one a lot.. ~Reeses~

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great expression of emotion. It flowed nicely and was vividly engaging. Good write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


gripping , sad and well written
and great piece of writing
R

Posted 11 Years Ago


very intense but straight to the point, it seems someone is always killing the dream. I love your poem nice work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Gripping all the way... the emotion cuts deep and evolved from the depths of the soul.

Very well expressed!




Posted 11 Years Ago


This is definitely a deep write. I ran through it a couple of times and got a deeper appreciation for it .

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I like it, I agree with "Thinker1", don't understand why it is in a poem style but it was good. This was my favorite part: "to watch death flash before my eyes the truth he so creatively intertwined with lies". Great lines!

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Posted 11 Years Ago


Good chapter! I don't know why this is in poem form, but it was still good.Well done!

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Posted 11 Years Ago


:D i loved the emoition in this poem. i loved the killing the dream thing! nicely written!
keep it up, haha :)

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Posted 11 Years Ago


I wonder is the dream a perfect relation. The absolute love. It sounds like it is, as if he murdered all you had built together with his "intertwined lies." I like it. The imagery was there and so was the strong clear cut emotion.

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Posted 11 Years Ago



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A LaDy NaMeD D
A LaDy NaMeD D

Smithfield, VA



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HI!!!! It's been a LONG time and a lot has changed. I think the only thing that hasn't changed is my want to be a published author. I typically write erotica, but i'm know to dibble and dabble in .. more..

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