Lust

I dare you

 

twist my arms in

spine cringing

fury

 

Burn me with your eyes

 

And I'll scream

pleading for release

...soft and sweet...

 

Your palm touches

my face

like silver pins

 

Tinkling down

my rib cage

I'm breaking

 

under your pressure

 

"dont die.." you whisper

with sedated longing.

Reviews

[Bard Constantine]

...

This is one of those writings that must be read multiple times... so far I saw lust as the title suggests, then an abusive relationship, and then...

Nicely penned. I enjoy it open interpretation with poems, that's the fun of reading it. You create great suspense with your sparse wording, excellent job.

[Crow]

Wow, I can see and feel the intensity of the moment...Very well done my dear.

wow that kinda packed a punch. didn't know what hit me. ok, what's with the puns?

[Jonathan De Elvira]

what a cruel relationship...I imagined a love hate kind couple doing their abuse towards each other.

[Norma M Sutton]

Interesting.

[David W Moore III]

This unleashes that dark longing. Someone with control. Make us what you want. Bring us to the edge. Nicely done.

[TadKent]

Sexy and dark! Very cool, tons of ominous but alluring overtones. :)

[alan peter kelly]

it's another WOW from me and a glass of cold water time...polished piece...so wholly resolved and precise that even in so few words the eroticism bleeds from its every pore...you are very qickly becoming one of my favourite writers here Desiree and i have no doubt that your literary future is a sun in the palms of your capable hands...

[Matthew Kult]

Sickly disturbing but I like it.

Lust in its purest form imo.

Well done.

[Robin]

this spolights the darkness of lust its spirit twisting force within our being bypassing the heart and antagonizing the soul

[Candylove.]

I completely agree with silent scream. A one of a kind piece. :)