THE HALLUCINATION

True Friends are a precious gift from God. "A Boy gets lost in a Hallucination, shares his experience and prays for eternal friendship of true friends..."

Author's Note

Please watch it on YouTube channel 'TSB Worldwide' too :)
https://youtu.be/99OCT8aIM_c

Reviews

[Ghost writer]

I liked when you said '...is what the soul in this shell cries' because it's true that our bodies are just shells, vessels they're not who we are, I wouldn't even say they're what we are, because the soul lasts forever, but the body never will.
When you were talking about the relative it would be 'a' not 'an'
I liked this it was sad that the friend wasn't real. I like that idea though.

[SoozProtege]

Thanks for sharing, a great write, I think it could use a little editing/condensing in some places to create a neuter flow. But good work here

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks a lot!

[Carina Baumert]

Such a powerful poem with a strong emotional message. I've felt that way sometimes after making a friend (either brand new or someone who didn't even speak to me in real life) during a dream and in the morning they were gone. Very easy to relate to writing. Keep it up!

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much for your sincere review! I too sometimes feel like losing a friend I did never befriend...

[alanwgraham]

Well done Devansh. You have done a great poetic job portraying the loss of a friend and how we pine for them. However we can keep them in our heart and move on.
Take care.
Alan

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much! And yes we should always keep true friends in our heart as everyone doesn't have true friends :) only the luckiest do

[light and ashes]

This hit me really hard...I remember being like this. Then I found my tribe. I remember how happy I was when I found them. Now no matter what happens...they will always have a very special place in my heart.. even if we completely grow apart, great poem.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks for your review Allie!
Well, will you please tell me what tribe were you talking about?

[light and ashes]

Not an actual tribe...just an expression more of how I felt about them.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Now I understand. Thank you for telling me :)

[light and ashes]

You're welcome :)

[Anushka joshi]

great writing styles !! Dev .. I just felt your lines in my heart
great job !!

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much Anushka!

[Kat]

I haven't read anything as true or as moving as this in a while. Amazing job, its beautifuly written and sounds heavily inspired and full of emotion.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much Kat!

[Robert Trakofler]

I liked this one Devansh and that's the nice kind of hallucination and a nice positive message in the end:)

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks a lot for your review!

[John the Baptist]

There is such a phenomenon known as after death experiences. People see, if only for a few moments, loved ones who have passed on. Usually the visions say they are all right and not to worry. These experiences have not been explained as yet.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

I didn't know about them. Thanks for letting me know, it's quite interesting.

[Shoshana]

This was tear-jerkingly beautiful. I love it, and have never seen anything like it. Unique and pain and beauty mixed to create a perfect concoction, the poem.
It's our soul, that is who we are. We're like a turtle, kinda like you said, a shell. What's on the inside is what matters... us.
This truly is a book of young beautiful wisdom.
-Shoshana

[Anjeline]

Interesting lines. Short but are like packets of wisdom.