TAINTED

Tainted neighbors

hideous favors.

 

Prompted retention

of things you think

are unmentioned.

 

No one else more

empowered to prove

your decency.

 

As you openingly

allow  your actions

to be subjected

to the community.

 

Reviews

[A sea person]

Amazing poem. You really did a great job with your word choice. Although, I do have a few questions about some of them.

(This is more of a grammatical/stylistic question)
In line two, you have the first word capitalized, but you do not do this for the rest of the lines. Does this mean that there should be a period at the end of line one?

In line three, you say, "Prompted Retention." Is there a reason why "Retention" is capitalized? I wasn't sure if there was a particular emphasis the reader should pick up on or how you wanted that to be viewed.

In line eleven, you say, "to be subjective." I wonder; did you mean subjected? Subjective means modified or affected by personal views, experience, or background or lacking in reality or substance (Merriam-Webster Dictionary). Subjected, on the other hand, means to expose to something. I believe "subjected" makes more sense here, but I'm not sure what you're trying to say: do you really mean to use subjective?

Anyway, I'm sorry for being so critical, but it really was a phenomenal poem!

v.r.
Ryan