Aurora and the Northern Star

AURORA AND THE NORTHERN STAR

Aurora danced all night,
the Northern Star, he followed
He tried to hold her tight
in her brightness, he was swallowed.

Frozen in his tracks,
he spoke his final words
they would never come back
flying south with the birds.

Aurora found the key
to keep the Northern Star
To dance eternally
He would not stray too far.
 
She lay down her tired head
Snowflakes made fresh covers
A final frozen bed.
for the star crossed lovers.

Aurora dreamed delight
the Northern Star, he followed
He tried to hold her tight
in her darkness,he was swallowed.

D.Hinson

Reviews

[Twilight]

Very good indeed, Dianah! It is surprising, that only one other person has reviewed this poem, so far. Both the flow and rhyme scheme are flawless, as far as I can see?

A lovely poem, which also has a true and consistent structure. Thankyou for sharing this with us, and adding it to to the "Beyond Fantasy" Group! Wo will be next, to add some of their writing, I wonder?

[Aldora Sparrow]

Wow! Very nice. My favorite part was the first and last stanza where it was only slightly different word-wise, but almost completely different emotionally and visiually. Very nice poem and it was a pleasure to read it. Keep on writing!

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful concept and beautifully phrased .. fine meter and from it, a true moving series of pictures.

'She lay down her tired head
Snowflakes made fresh covers
A final frozen bed.
for the star crossed lovers.'

The above really hit the bell for me.. such grand meter and creative thinking.

Thank you for sharing a brief but exemplary piece of writing.

[Greg Close]

I agree this is really nice, and reads very polished. I particularly like the structure and the parallel in the "in darkness/light swallowed." The only line that seemed to skip on the rhythm on my first reading was the "flying south with the birds" - this might just be me, but I dangling there waiting for one more syllable? This is probably my issue, not yours... but there it is! Great poem, thanks for posting!

[CLUTZ]

awesomeness.....doubt that's a word but i like this poem.