The Night Hunt

About the Moon Goddess, her dogs and Desire.

the restless dogs rustle
through the wooded labyrinth
following the scent.

Bowing to the moon goddess
Drawn down to earth
Such a heavenly descent.

Reflections quiver on the lake
Quickening heartbeats
Warm their breath.

The restless dogs know
the horn of the huntress
Signals immanent Death.

She joins them on the hunt
their allegiance so true
never once denied.

She sniffs the cool night air
Bow and arrow alert
by her side.

She stops, silently raising
her divine weapon
to aim, fire!

She shoots the arrow straight
into the pumping heart
of Desire...

Desire is defeated
they devour her completely
Appetites satisfied.

The dogs feed on lust
full of Desire
The Moon Goddess cried.

D.Hinson

Author's Note

Changed quite a few bits of this.

Reviews

[Twilight]

I think it would be fair to say, that your wording is in keeping with the mythological scenario. For some reason, every verse is very short indeed, and yet you still manage to express plenty of emotion. If memory serves me correctly, the goddess concerned, would either be Dionysus or Athena? (I admit to not knowing the correct spellings). One would assume, that Dianah is a word, which has its roots in the Latin name for this goddess of the moon?

I know that the writer is more than capable of making a poem rhyme, if and when she wishes. However, she seems to have avoided doing that, in this case? The advantage of this, is that it allows the poet to include, a greater choice of words. And still, this is a true poem. I mean, it has a proper format (three lines per verse for example), and is a genuine pleasure to read.

The use of words which can be associated with one another, is quite clear and purposeful in this poem. "Lust" and "desire" for example, can easily be associated with the "hunger" of the hunting dogs for their prey. And of course, lust of a carnal nature, can also be compared with the animalistic hunger of dogs. Lastly, I found that the sheer length of this poem, does make sense. I mean, it is quite protracted, and for me, this brings to mind, a long and arduous hunt! Thankyou, Dianah. Great writing!