CASTLE OF MY LOVE

Where should i walk

If not the garden of your love?

If not your favorites,

What songs i must hum?

The blue sky or rainbow doesn't 

hover me but just your thoughts.

I remember the red evening sun on

your face by the beach as we walk.

July rain playing with your skin

while you circle and dance heedlessly.

I have made a castle with

sundry colors of my abiding love

And i shall live here.

Reviews

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Alrightie, the first poem I get to read is one of love, nice!

I get a touch of approval in the first 4 lines, as the speaker asks where they should walk and what should they hum.

The speaker finds the thoughts of the other person to be beautiful as it replaces things like a rainbow.

As I got into the second half, could this love be a memory?
A love that has not yet faded since a castle has been built in it’s memory.

Now I think that that day was just a memory, but perhaps the love is still strong and persisting that a castle was built to represent it even if there are a mix of feelings (sundry of colors).

It’s been a while reading into other poems, so it’s a long way back in, thank you for the amazing read.

[barleygirl]

I don't usually like romantic poems, but this one took me in & led me along the path of your message with an element of suspense. I had no idea where this love story was going or how all the details in your poem would connect, but in the end, everything fit together under the "castle" theme. I love how "castle" symbolizes a sandcastle on the beach AND a secret hiding place near the narrator's heart. I really enjoy the way you show your imagery (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Digvijay Singh]

Thank you Margie. It amazes me when it rains on a beach. I don't know why but it does. I'm glad you liked a "Love poem"

[Unspoken poet]

This is such a wonderful write, I enjoyed this

[Digvijay Singh]

Thank you choosen (if that is your name)

[Sarah K Cass]

This makes me think of warm summer evenings in the UK, walking on our local beach hand in hand with my love. Very evocative words.

[Digvijay Singh]

Thank you for the read Amber

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words and thoughts. You made the reader believe every word. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Digvijay Singh]

Thank you for the review Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem and you are welcome.

[Fairy Khan]

A love like that!
So deep and passionate.
Keep writing. :)

[Digvijay Singh]

Hey Khurshid, thanks for the read and comment. :)

[Fairy Khan]

You’re welcome.
My name is Fairy, by the way. Khurshid is my father. :)

[Digvijay Singh]

Oh god. I'm so sorry. They are so right to call me stupid. Sorry again

[Fairy Khan]

It’s okay, friend.

[Vin]

Short yet truly deep it is. May you write like this and connect with all of us.

[Digvijay Singh]

I'm glad you liked it Vin. Thanks

[Kelly Scheppers]

"...I remember the red evening sun on your face by the beach as we walked."

It sounds like love, the kind that makes your heart race whenever you feel the presence of the one you love. I am whisked away whenever I read you, Digvijay.

[Vin]

True words

[Digvijay Singh]

Thanks for the words Kelly. You're the best