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Time is running out.

Quick, Quick

My worries are thick,

like blankets of dust, packed on grit.

Quick, Quick

The world is sick.

Man is consumed by worldliness.

Quick, Quick

Are you safe from it?

Do you have a plan?  The end of man is coming-

Quick!

You can't run, you can't hide, so get ready for it.

The clock is winding down, no time left to fool around.

Shhh...

Do you hear it slow?

The wind, the sea, they tell you so.

Don't trust those signs?

Look around.

All those buildings crashing down,

Our entire world has twirled up-side down.

Quick, Quick!

Not a moment to waste,

the time has come to learn your fate.

Are you covered with God's grace?

That's the only way to get out, safe.

Quick!

It's too late.

Now it's time to face your fate.

Reviews

[~Dragon X]

Honestly, this made me heartbeat go up notches. XD
The "Quick, quick" add a very nice rythm which I absolutely adore and at the same time added to the intensity.
The last two lines though didn't seem to flow together for me. :/
Maybe "It's too late, time to face your fate"?
The "Now it's" bit just doesn't seem...flowy to me. XD
I dunno, if it sounds great to you shun my criticism. It's your poem after all :3

[Summer D.]

I agree. I agree. I agree! Truly awesome poem. The truth behind these words are something I'm all too familiar with. It had a casual feel but it didn't take away from the heavy weight of the meaning of the words. I don't have any particular qualms about the poem. Spectacular. The repetition of some words really helped to draw me in. Another write for the wall of fame Jameela.

YT,
Summer

[Ami N.]

Interesting piece. I like the intense rhythm you put into your poems through the repetition of words, in this case 'quick'. Also, the idea behind the poem is unique; you put light on a matter that is very often shadowed by other factors. I like this poem. Simple and it points out human flaws well.
In ways, it is similar to my latest poem, but it adds a flow to it that is lacking in mine and you cover a broader view; mine is specific.
Great piece :)

[Jasmine Thousand]

Wow-creepy. Gave me goosebumps.
I love the rhyme scheme, and those last two lines?
E-P-I-C!
Great write! :O I can easily visualize the scenes in the poem. Great imagery.
~Jasmine Thousand~