Obey

Paranoia on a mass scale.

We are taking over.

Bit by bit we are taking over.

We are everywhere that you look.

We are on your TV’s.

We are inside your radios.

We are within the very depths of your consciousness.

There is no escape.

As you have no idea.

That we were there to begin with.

We are in your newspapers.

We are in your computers.

Telling you what to think.

Telling you how to react.

Do you know what is real?

We do.

Obey.

We are your new gods now.

Reviews

[Lucia Morgan]

i think you have really good ideas and i love the topic of your poems but you i feel a lack of tension. Play around with editing your lines and cutting out anything that is unnecessary to your poems point/objective.
for example, here is what it looks like without all the repetitious "we are":

Taking over,
Bit by bit.
Everywhere that you look,
On your TV's,
Inside your radios,
Within the depths of your consciousness.
There is no escape.

[GrandDystopia]

Thank you very much for the constructive criticism, I'll admit I rarely ever redraft poems as I am more of a fiction guy but again thank you, your suggestions make me wish I thought of that the first time haha :)

[¿]

I recently learnt about paranoia and it's causes on human minds...Makes one too anxious to mingle in a new or unwanted situation...
Somehow I like the total presentation of your perspective towards this matter...Good work! Be blessed :)

[mercy party]

Great topic. I liked the use of WE. its made it sound like an announcement . the poem was effective in its important message. nice Job.

[Emma Kirchhoff]

Reminds me so much of 1984 by George Orwell, minus the "unknowing" part. It is such an interesting concept, to be monitored so heavily through everything imaginable. Well done!

[Night]

Okay, I am seriously freaked out by how true this is. Paranoia is a shadow, seeping into every creek and fissure of our beings. Brilliant write!

[Sam]

Society? The popular trend? All the messages we hear and see so much that we start to believe it is real. We blur the colors black and white with all these shades of grey. Awesome poem I hear it loud and hear it clear. Thank you.

[Melanie Genevieve]

Loving the ideas behind this write!! Really unique! I'm eager to read more of your stuff!

[GrandDystopia]

Thank you very much, I'm not a poet at all though, I'm more of a short fiction guy but again thank you :) If there is anything of your you'd like me to read in return, I'd be happy to oblige.

[Melanie Genevieve]

poet or not you are a writer and this is great! keep it up! & it was a pleasure.

[Mizo4]

nice poem, its very symbolic of bodies that control us but also makes me think of aliens :D

[GrandDystopia]

Thanks again and I never thought of the aliens angle haha, just gave a whole new idea :D Thanks again!

[Brenda Caballero]

Wow. This poem was captivating - such an eerie truth.

I like your simplicity. There, that's a personal opinion, not constructive criticism. I have to admit that I'm a little intimidated by your writing, enough so that I can't give you anything but compliments and a pat on the back for such fine style.

Your last line freaked me out, literally felt like I was being watched.

Keep at it!

[GrandDystopia]

Why thank you for the kind words, if there is anything you'd like me to read so I can return the favour I'd be more than happy to oblige. Thanks again :)

[Brenda Caballero]

You're very welcome! You can go ahead and read anything you feel like, I'm not in a hurry to get reviews. :) But thanks.