A Poem

An impossible love story.

I needn’t stroke your silken hair
or touch rose petal skin.
The type of love I have for you....
it burns from deep within.

While in my soul the fires rage,
and nothing is consumed.
My spirit wanders aimlessly,
from room to darkened room.

The proper words I cannot say,
to show you my great love.
Yet here I’m staring at your face,
while you look from above.

Still my heart stirs with great desire,
to reach up and touch you.
As these feelings that I’m feeling,
I know they’re in you too.

 

But you will someday think of me,
when this book you have closed.
And I am just a memory....
and not the one you chose.

Alas...
Of all that I have looked up at,
‘tis you I wished I’d known.
For yours is a breathing spirit,
and mine.... I’m just a poem.

 

A Sean Allen Poem

© 2006 D McDaniel Hayden

Reviews

[Edward James]

With 50+ reviews, I doubt I can tell you anything new or groundbreaking as far as analysis goes, so I'll say that I really do like this poem. I'm a sucker for old fashioned rhyme schemes and rhythm, and not being a visual person, for me the aural sensation of reading a poem is quite often every bit as important as the message conveyed. Saying that, I love the pulse of this piece, and the idea that a poem (whether yours or someone else's) is observing and caring for you in the same way you do it is quite pleasant. I think I may have to reevaluate some poetry after reading this.

Nice write, I look forward to reading more

Edward

[King Pooface]

I am still young, and I don't think I've ever experienced a love as profound as you describe. Some day... The way you describe it in truth makes me think of love once again. Is true love destined for all? Do all have a choice of whether they might find such love? A very thought-provoking poem for the youth of the world.

[Mysteryk]

I don't have a review for you ...just trying to mark this one as my favorite...thank you for composing it and sharing it with us...

[Ilyiana]

I had to catch my breath, the end was so profound. I gasped and my hand went up to my mouth and I whispered, "Oh my God." I just sat there stunned and had to take a few minutes to have it really sink in. Sean... you have captured the "power of words."

Ilyiana

[Sam Freeland]

The warmth of these loving words
in now being shared by everyone.

[Nefertiti]

This brought so many feelings up and through that so many memories. I enjoyed feeling this, truly.
Jolanda

[Butch Mcpeterson ( I Ca..]

Great write.... I loved this poem....
It flows very well and I loved the ending....
Good job

Your pal,
Butch

[Janyce Helen Van Es]

I wonder if my poems think the same way of me or if they think I am just a little demented? Great Job, Donn.

[Torre]

I think everybody said what could be said about this poem. Definetely gave me a different perspective of writing a poem.

[Blueyedreamer]

your fifth stanza makes me think of looking up at an amazing statue and trying to reach out and touch it as if to touch the artist that made it, to know what it was they were thinking when as they formed thier masterpiece. thank you Sean for your contribution.

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Absolutely wonderful!!!!!