The Return

Valiant men coming home

Merrily cheering

The heroes come home

Valiant men

Who fought their battles

Saved them from all harm

A feast is held

What an honor

Ranked above all

The bravest in all the land

They fought

They won

They conquered

Some think of them wisely

Others despise

Why would they throw

Their life away?

They care only

For the gold,

The riches,

The honor

Only a matter of time before

Another battle

Rises from the ashes

Author's Note

Please Comment
Constructive criticism is welcomed

Reviews

[Lizzie Mitchell]

I like the contrast between the beginning and the end.
The beginning focuses on the return of the men as a joyous occasion.
But, the end focuses on the more negative aspects.
Why are they doing it?
And even worse, they're just going to be going back to battle.

[Zac]

Thank you,
I find it was more emotional if I started all joyous and then focused on the negative aspects.

[Riley Justine]

The difference between your focus at the beginning and the end is really cool. Good job!

[Zac]

Thank you,
I was in a swing of moods that day.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told the truth. Soldiers will fight, die and some will come home. I served like my father. My father served like his father. Wars keep a-coming. A powerful poem with the truth being told. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Zac]

Thank you for the excellent comment.
We talked about the world wars at school that day.
So that gave me the message

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well and you are welcome.

[Ilerah]

Love it as much as the rest, your a good poet, keep it up.

[Zac]

Why thank you

[Ankur Jain]

Now that's how you use imagery into poetry...
"Another battle rises from the ashes"
the best part is that readers are free to attach their own interpretation to the image.
that's why poems can be even more influential than the stories, becoz unlike stories, poems doesn't restrict themselves to any particular interpretation.. everyone sees what they want to see ( just like in a Rorschach ink blot test)

[Zac]

Thank you for the excellent comment

[Ankur Jain]

My pleasure!!