Words for None

Just a random folly of words I spilled out

I'm coming to you dear
I will make it
Not wasted
You can shake your tragic fear
Or just fake it
But don't wake it
Because soon I will be near
I will be coming
Becoming
Just to whisper in your ear
You're stunning
Keep running
Because soon I hope that we're
Not just yearning
But learning
I sure will be your seer
I'm earning
It's burning
I'll hold the wheel to steer
We are dashing
Not crashing
But the only thought is mere
Reaction
Not passion
So time to change a gear
Stop withholding
It's folding
The vision justly will appear
Be sober
It's over

Author's Note

JG, March 2011

Reviews

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

a love unfolding with sober eyes? Excellent!

[HB]

Meh, I think you need to think about this one a little. It really does feel like a word chain...

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Excellently written, just like a well crafted song.

[Emily]

Much better! It flows more and I get a better grip of the story told in the poem Good!

[Derek S.Keck]

I like the imagry you produce in this poem, it well bled and perfect. Whats cool about everything I've read of yours so far is that you have such a range of style and your not afraid to take it anywhere. Excellent!

[Emily]

I like the basis of the poem,but not the repeating.I'd scratch one of the repeating lines.It would flow better.Normally I don't prefer rhyming to not,but this time I do. It gives the poem substance,somehow.Nice job!