And So You Loved Him...

Newly edited. :)

Fire - fire burning bright,

as my state of mind intensifies.

Mania - ecstatic cries

eat away as reality dies.

Hold me as you want to

and don't waste my time.

Just want to embrace your mind,

and heart as secrets I will find.

And feel the way I wish to

as the days pass me by,

but with you, I shall cry,

because I don't want to die

without feeling how I did with him,

with someone who would let me in.

For love is a feeling felt strong,

and just won't fade when felt too long.

So tell me how you loved him

and if love ever fades,

for I believe it when you say

echoed regrets are never the same.

But if you loved him

then could you love me?

Or is it just that you'd do anything

just to feel wanted, and to live that dream?

 

And is that so different from me?

Reviews

[rockinmiley555]

i like this, cause i can relate to it. trust me, it gets better with time. this is very good! :)

[darkgurl]

Fire - fire burning bright,
as my state of mind intensifies.
Mania - ecstatic cries
eat away as reality dies.

I like this opening and how you broke it on down into stanzas as you wrote this. A write very well done!

[Beautifully_Anarchist]

It's almost pleading.. a brave, vulnerable and wonderful piece of work - thoroughly enjoyed it.

This is good. I liked the line Just want to embrace your mind and heart as secrets I will find. That was great! Very poetic!

[Travis Ralston aka LIAR]

Very nice. Love is a constant for everyone and you've expressed a part of it here so well.