My mistress

Life is a mysterious mistress;
miraculously I endeavor her endless erosion of the foundation of dirt I lay myself upon.
Wishing for a stable place where I could safely seek the serenity I so desperately crave.

Author's Note

Let me have it

Reviews

[Wynter Ignatius]

We all seek it, few find it and even them many squander that once they are there rather than deal with the upkeep one would expect.

I have a feeling I will stopping in here quite a bit - enjoying your work.

[Pryde Foltz]

Wishing for a stable place where I could safely seek the serenity I so desperately crave.

Wonderful phrasing … that place … so I have been told … lies within:)

[Ezekiel Silver]

A stunning piece that stirs up the spirit of any reader. Excellent work.

[David Scott]

Thinking of one's life as a mistress... Well you twisted me up a little in my thinking. Good job.
Will "serenity" ever be found while one "desperately craves"? I like like the tension you wrote and the opposing emotions served in the same bite added a nice complexity to the the flavor of the thought.

[Daniel Eckert]

This poem, in my opinion, needs so much work I should just trash. Thank you for the kind words.

[David Scott]

Never trash your work. I liked this. Each write is an antique of our own thoughts and emotion. Refurbish your efforts and treat yourself with respect in all things. Be critical, but only in an honest effort to be constructive.
Sorry, I tend to give advice... Tell me to bugger off if I offend.

[Daniel Eckert]

I love advice! Especially from fellow writers. I may be over critical on myself but that is because I know inside of every single one of us is greatness. I'm just trying to taunt it out of me.

[David Scott]

Yes. It is there! :)
Learn to tempt instead of taunt. Both work. One is a happier life than the other.

[Mark]

I love the first and third lines. The second would be really great, but I keep stumbling over the 'endeavor her endless erosion'... I can't find the image in my head to make it fit. Still, it spoke to me. I enjoyed reading.

[Daniel Eckert]

I forgot this poem was on here. I meant to burn it ages ago.. I am glad you enjoyed it though. read moreI forgot this poem was on here. I meant to burn it ages ago.. I am glad you enjoyed it though.

Thank you for taking time to read my piece!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the theme...was a bit tripped by the long lines...would like to see several short lines instead...

but that is just me..

others may like the format just fine.

i also would like to see the "mistress" idea come back around at the end.

[Daniel Eckert]

I like em short; I feel this one ended not quite right though. I will play around with it. Thank you for your advise.