Happiness

Sometimes,

Before the eerie touch of despair

Or after the gentle grasps of doubt

There comes a vase of living happinesses

Each beautiful

Thriving

And colored in their own respects

All carrying an underlying tranquility

Surrounded in fizzing bubbles

And sweet scents

 

But this is

A time

Where time

Makes all things mortal

The happinesses, cradled in their crystal case

Wither away and die.

And then comes Despair and Doubt

Closely followed by the Angers

 

But this is not a story about

Anger

Or

Doubt

Or

Despair

It is the story

Of the cycle

Of growing happiness,

Cultivated and cut-

Displayed in vases-

And loved as center pieces-

Of lives and worlds,

That will eventually die

But grow once again.

 

For Despair, Doubt, and their brothers, the Angers

Will never stay forever

While people still plant

Seeds of hope

Into the world’s weary soil

Author's Note

Oh, free verse poetry! The lack of confines give to much freedom to silly writers!

Reviews

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"Before the eerie touch of despair
Or after the gentle grasps of doubt
There comes a vase of living happiness..."
...god...love this--great imagery!!!

J:)

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"Where time
Makes all things mortal
The happiness's, cradled in their crystal case
Wither away and die."
...that entire verse is wonderful-
but this line especially-i love:)
...great 'verse libre' as they say...
truly-i love this:-)
..and wow!!!
"While people still plant
Seeds of hope
Into the world’s weary soil..."

J:)

[J.Black]

I love free verse poems. Heck, it let's the mind wonder and expose hidden thoughts from our brains. Thankfully, this one was created. It was very well put together. I must say you have excellent taste in words. "Before the eerie touch of despair" ... it's very descriptive and vivid. There's not much "happiness" poems written on this site (or unless all my friends are depressed, lol!) .. but this was a different read for me. I naturally enjoyed it.

One comment of constructive criticism? Well I'd like to see you change the words up abit. It's not a rhyming scheme or repattive, so I'd like to see the word "despair" be altered a tad. I mean, you have it again here: "Or Doubt/Or Despair" .. I just think you can re-create that image in my head with a different word! :)

As for the metaphor of a flower being happiness is lovely. I myself draw that comparison. And for its ending? It's wonderful. Keep it up. You're very creative.

[Taste of Ink]

Ah. I love free verse. This was excellent! It's so true the way you personified happiness. I'm envious of your imagery. The pictures you paint with your words are amazing. I know I told you that before but I feel like it had to be said again :)

[Snapdragon]

It does at times we're going through cycles waiting for happiness to come back around. I loved the personification that you used. I loved this! Isn't free verse fun.
:-)

[Mary Evans]

Since i ran out of stories to review i though i might as well review some of your poems (tough luck for you since i suck at poetry XD)

So yea i saw you said this was free verse so since my knowledge doesn't include any free verse poetry i cant say anything about the style. Anyhow, language and flow seem good, although in some places i think the rhythm falls a bit.

As for the idea and depth, I find it quite original and deep with emotion and at the same time some sort of numbness (at least that's how i see the moment it talks about despair, doubt and anger. You know the emotion rises as you talk about the nice stuff and suddenly stops as you reach the opposites)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I must tell you that I think this is excellent poetry. It was very well written and quite interesting how you incorporated each happiness in the vase of life experience as a seperate and individual flower.

[azlamalo]

love it. I'd say more but the previous reviews pretty much said it...thanx for sharing

[Sasha]

I like this - especially the last stanza. It's interesting that there's more than one Anger. I also loved the metaphor of happiness being a flower being linked to the commonly used "seeds of hope". You definitely get points for originality and it's well-written too.

[BodilessSoul]

At first, I thought this was going to be depressing but its so pretty and full of hope. I love that you personified feelings. It gives the poem a nice touch. Good job ^.^