Together At Last

Another Romantic one (done with the horror work... For now)

Me

Wanting

Lusting

Loving

Longing 

You 

Willing

Thinking 

Waiting

Debating

Us

Together

Forever

At last 

Confessing eternal love

Author's Note

Write this one a while ago and its one of my Drake type poems

Reviews

[michele vera]

I Really Loved This! Absolutely Well Placed-Wording and The Theme Of Eternal Love is One Of My Favorite Themes. You Totally Captured The emotion Very Accurately. It somehow made me think of a Rock song, from the Band Call Arctic Monkeys the song is called "Do I Wanna Know." It has the same Push and Pull of two Lovers. That constant Pull of True Love. Excellent Poem!

[Jack Kennedy]

I am absolutely flattered by your comments! They mean a great deal to me and I'm very astounded to know you like the poem as much as you did! Thanks a ton and thanks for reviewing!

[michele vera]

Your Very Welcome! I Truly enjoyed Reading Your Poetry! Very Very Well Done!

[Mel Lisa]

poem went by like a speed of light lol. But it summed up most relationship experiences. Glad it had such a happy and blissful ending. very well done. good work:)

[just Penny]

Like the word choice here and the format works well with the message. I know that whenever I visit your poetry, there will be something unique and different to enjoy. Well done :)

[RAOrourke]

Hi Jack,
I enjoyed your poem! Keep up your writing!

[A. Amos]

Compelling and enjoyable read. Well done!

[Ravyne Hawke]

I've never listened to Drake, not really into rap or hip hop, but I like the flow of this one from me to you to us... creates a perfect balance. The words you've used show the stages of how one feels about love and relationships... and by saying that, I would make the following changes: first stanza, move line 5 to line 3. Me Wanting, Longing, Lusting, Loving... second stanza, move line 2 to line 5. You Thinking, Waiting, Debating, Willing...... does that make any sense? I hope so, and I think it will tighten this poem more by creating that flow of emotions. Good job, Jack. I give this one an 8 as well.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of words. You used the words with skill create thoughts of love and possibilities. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jack Kennedy]

I'm sooooo greatful you enjoyed the works and thanks again and again

[Brianna Brie]

This poem elicits emotion from the reader. Each stanza builds upon the other, (The "Me" the "You" the "Us") until they mesh together in an eternal way. I think you did an awesome job on this poem. It is simple yet effective.

[Jack Kennedy]

I'm glad you enjoyed my works. Feel free to stop by anytime to read review more. Greatly appreciated!!!!

[maria ( rose)]

wow! Like that title! Me, You, Us. Wonderful poem ..Like this one a lot !!
-maria rose

[Sami Khalil]

A wonderful poem. Glad I passed by your place...Bravo and Roll Tide...:)..............

[abluehorseandflowers]

Feels a like a senryu. Not quite descriptive and almost evocative. It's nicely catchy.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the feedback. Greatly appreciated