Draft Day

The Motion

              

On the twenty second of may,

For me is a certain draft day

Drafted to a land of uncertainty

This fact alone just worries me

Shipped out with a lost mind

All of us lined up to be set 'free'

What will ever happen to me

Must I be drafted in the league

Will I end up like others before me

Heartless, miserable and alone

Hopeless, detestable and single

Who knows, I'll find out in time

On the twenty second of may

I will be on the stage waiting,

Waiting to be finally drafted,

Drafted to a land of uncertainty

Author's Note

I graduate high school tomorrow 5/22/14 and these are my thoughts on it...

Reviews

[Wynter Ignatius]

As I stepped from the threshold of childhood to that of a young man so many years ago I too took the time in stride, questioning life like do now. I still hope I will be half the man I want to be but that like many things is a process of time and effort.

Kudos man and keep it up.

[Jack Kennedy]

I certainly will and thank you for stopping by!

[Wynter Ignatius]

Yeah, I'm playing catch-up with my requests - three digits is a bit much to be in the red.

[Jack Kennedy]

Wow three digits? That's gonna be a heavy duty I must say but good luck with it, I'm sure it'll be fine

[Wynter Ignatius]

Just feel behind due to various things and want to catch up a bit. I don't request myself often as I would rather people discover my stuff on their own time but I'm the type that will always take a look when requested; can't go against my nature after all.

[Barbara Kasey Smith]

Jack this voice speaks of what is in the writer's mind...fear, anxiety and uncertainty is major on the list...there's images here of things that could be (but) uncertainty of the outcome. In a sense the writer presents an image of freedom to soar but sadness robs his freedom's because a human mind runs wild with images of failure and an ending. I loved this Jack it puts the poem into pure perspective and allows the reader to feel it too.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for the review and the feedback! I'm glad you felt what I wrote!

[Barbara Kasey Smith]

Your Welcome!!/BKSmith

[TPK Stories]

Congratulations on your graduation...

Excellent write...you are entering a world of independence as well as uncertainty as you embark on your journey as an adult...hoping goes well in your new chapter in your life.

[Linda Moon]

Ahh, it is indeed a path of uncertainty but a wondrous path filled with many journeys... Each step will be a lesson to the next; to be the person you were meant to be. May peace and light shine upon your heart...

[Jack Kennedy]

Awe thank you for your wise and kind words :) I'm very grateful for them :)

[Linda Moon]

You're most welcome...
And thank you for being an inspiration in mine :-)

[stars are far]

That was very good, congrats..
and hey hehe 22-5 my dadys bday :$
"Free" haha o remember i felt that when i was graduating my high school, i felt like im in a military haha and the music was like my heart beats haha,, very funny .. and hey i dont think that it was that bad , though i am "Hopeless, detestable and single" hahah sometimes, not usually, but i know that life is we made it, since we create and it never creates us...
i hope that better days are coming for you and nothing bad will happen, be hopeful :)
and that was a good piece :D

[Bowers]

very interesting, I wish you well my friend, I too graduate this year (in 11 days) :P and I too feel very anxious about it ..... I truly love this image of a graduate facing his future with caution.... great write, good luck!

[Jack Kennedy]

Congratulations on graduating and I wish the best of luck to you as well! Thanks for the review

[Kasey Miriam]

Very relisistic feeling to have about leaving the "save zone" of life and stepping into the real world that school hides from people.

[Stefanie Holmes]

I really liked this Jack. The uncertainties of life once we graduate high school can certainly be overwhelming! You penned that nicely with this one.

~Stefanie

[gabrielle]

This piece echoes the same feelings and sentiments i had when i graduated. Being outside the walls of school is full of uncertainty but that makes it more exciting. Congratulations!

[Dillon]

nice thought it was interesting

[lissalovesyou]

Draft day..."Drafted to a land of uncertainty"
How true.
But I'm sure this land of uncertainty will turn into a land of safe, and secure, happiness.
Congrats on graduating!
lissalovesyou:)