Passionate

Sweet love of my life. You will always be in my heart.

The symbols of making 

Glisten drapes of concealed love

How I want this to last forever(never)

You created this mass

This vessel of pleasure(terror)

How I wish you would escape

Trapped

Spending your time

Wondering where the children have fled

I only wanted the good in you

So I carved it out

The bad, it remained 

It grew into something else

Kill it(I love you) Kill it(I need you) Kill it(Mine forever)

I will kill it all for you

My one true summer

It illudes me

These echoes of voices(Take me)

Sundered, my mind tortured

Bringing me closer to you

You shined so bright(Power)

An angel of light

So I clipped your wings 

In the dark

Caged

Spiraling in moments of fear

I cling to your image

Oh, how I wish you were here

I only wanted the best of you

So I saved it for last

The bad, it remained

It festered into the final....

Part of you

Kill it(I hate you) Kill it(You are nothing) Kill it(Take me away)

I will kill it all for you

My one true winter

But you left me dear..

So I left you near

Inside my home

Forever(never) more

 

Author's Note

Thank you for you reading. Leave your thoughts if you want!

Reviews

[Thepensiveplayer]

A very riveting piece you've written here. I find it akin to wanting a person's spirit to stay with you in a form you found them most loving in. Its like throughout the interaction the decisions you pondered drive your mind and heart in several directions emotionally. This shows you how many feelings we can possibly have as people, along with much more. Amazing work and keep on writing. :)

[Final-Karma]

The spectrum of emotions is vast and at any given time a person can experience one or more of them. Thank you again for your thoughts!

[Laurierose]

This reminds me of a song, though this also reminds me of the uncertainty of the heart. Whispers are light though they carry weight to sway you into decisions. It's as if such catharsis was reached from the speaker though otherwise thoughts conflicted with better judgement. The funny thing about better judgement, though, is that at the end of the day it's all choice.

"You shined so bright(Power)
An angel of light
So I clipped your wings
In the dark."

This was powerful. This part could stand alone, though it added such depth to the poem. This seemed as if the speaker wanted to transmit such complex feelings for understanding. When all we know is up, then we can't fathom what's beneath. When all we know is joy, then we won't comprehend relief. When all we know is light, darkness isn't a possibility. Until now. Amazing work. Great read.

[Final-Karma]

So well said! I am glad you liked this piece. It was a bit rocky for me because believe it or not, there are times when words can not describe what one is feeling. Sometimes you have to reach for words that don't exist yet. I tried my best to portray both sides of a vision. Thank you again for reading my work!

[Laurierose]

Of course, it was a delight!

[Wyrn Tiger]

quite lyrical. Your message is all so clerical.

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much!

[TwistedTwins]

I don't know why but I feel like this would make a good rock song (someone like GreenDay singing it). Maybe it was the adlibs or maybe it was the elegant writing. I enjoyed it though, so thanks for sharing.

[Final-Karma]

It was my intention actually. I use to be a writer for a band so just playing around with ideas. Thank you for sharing your thoughts!

[Lust for Propinquity]

Wowwww this is really good. Like fantastic :D

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much!!

[Riddhi]

This is quite a nice poem..Actually the first line itself was indeed good...There were various things which i liked in this writing...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing.
Riddhi

[Final-Karma]

Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it!