Lost Children

Lost Children

A Poem by Final-Karma
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I wonder what sort of criteria you use to divide people into good and evil

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There are,
Two faces to my whole
My heart is cold
I'm all alone

Surrounded by the people
This seat is evil
Let there be silence

Beckoned taps on a solid door
Creaks of loss 
Weeps of tragedy
How foolish you are

To make peace,
But to settle the score
Revenge is only bliss..

Cheeks of loved ones kissed
Tossed into the earth 
One final glance at the hollow abyss

The lonely children with tears in their hearts
Not on their face
Since lack of water is truth to a world,
Filled with hate

The art of war pinpoint like a ticking clock
Seem small, but walk tall
Carry the biggest stick 

Never forget who you are!

Sadly,
Self identity is one half of the whole
A lack of insight will leave you dead

Alone....

So they took you away from me 
Away from the world
You will be remembered 

We spread your wings 

Ascended 

© 2018 Final-Karma


Author's Note

Final-Karma
Random thoughts once again. I could not think of an end since this is an ongoing feeling. Thank you for reading.

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This was very touching and sentimental. The first few lines describing the wholeness of self in referencing two faces stood out to me. We often adorn many masks throughout a day. We have this poker face that the world sees and the realness of ourselves are kept under wraps until we are comfortable with lowering the mask.

"Beckoned taps on a solid door."

This line reminded me on true, utter solitude. When I envision someone tapping on a solid door I'm reminded of the resounding silence of the room behind it. Very interesting way of phrasing. I like it.

Towards the end, when the speaker referencing their other half ascending towards the sky I'm reminded of the title of this poem. It seems as though this other person was their other half and without each other then they'd be lost children in a world where they knew nothing of but each other. Beautifully chilling and extremely heartfelt. Great read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

As always, your in depth analysis not only describes my work but it helps me to even decipher my own.. read more



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Is there really a division between good and evil in people? Not really. We all have a little of each, or a lot of one, and a little of the other -- even a psychopath isn't evil - just devoid of empathy. The worst villains on earth often have a few people they love -- and with those people they are not evil. A very good write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

You are absolutely right. Thank you for such an intriguing review. You have given much to think abou.. read more
Emotional and great thought. Wonderful sentiment and what a lovely poetic way to put it. I like how this is written.

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Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!
I like the way you mixed things up.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

Thank you!
Love it you definitely got to me on that one!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for reading my work!
Beautiful! Simply beautiful

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Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!
Although the thoughts were random as said, the essence of the poem was not. It really reflected the latest scenarios in a splendid manner. The description of "two faces" was indeed amazing and calls for a self introspection to all.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for a thoughtful review!
This was very touching and sentimental. The first few lines describing the wholeness of self in referencing two faces stood out to me. We often adorn many masks throughout a day. We have this poker face that the world sees and the realness of ourselves are kept under wraps until we are comfortable with lowering the mask.

"Beckoned taps on a solid door."

This line reminded me on true, utter solitude. When I envision someone tapping on a solid door I'm reminded of the resounding silence of the room behind it. Very interesting way of phrasing. I like it.

Towards the end, when the speaker referencing their other half ascending towards the sky I'm reminded of the title of this poem. It seems as though this other person was their other half and without each other then they'd be lost children in a world where they knew nothing of but each other. Beautifully chilling and extremely heartfelt. Great read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

As always, your in depth analysis not only describes my work but it helps me to even decipher my own.. read more
Wow, you truly have a gift.. Thank you for sharing your treasures with us all.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Final-Karma

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much! I just express my thoughts and feelings is all.
Dawn

1 Year Ago

Please do keep sharing your thoughts and feelings. As, I enjoy reading your them.

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