Ghosts of Soldiers

Questions the mind alone cannot answer

What, from my blood, my mind,
can create sustenance, pestilence?
What oblique proof is there
out among the wandering species
to find me guilty or worthy
of anything at all?
Must I exhume marrow, diagnose
these diseases with a microscope?
Will the hyperbole destroy me
when I find I'm as small as an atom
and as powerful as God?

Who will peel the existentialists from the
boots of dead soldiers, and will I find I'm
marching with their spirits around the same
nucleus? Last night I dreamt of spirals,
prayed to God that I'm not being screwed.

Reviews

[Dani California]

Oh WOW!!

This is exceptional.

"Who will peel the existentialists from the
boots of dead soldiers, and will I find I'm
marching with their spirits around the same
nucleus? Last night I dreamt of spirals,
prayed to God that I'm not being screwed"

This stanza still has its hands around my neck and I'm searching for air.
The minds of writers just amaze me, and how they (you) are able to
manipulate their words so brilliantly to express what is felt. This is brilliant.
The entire piece is fantastic....

Such talent you have my friend! Thank you for sharing it :)

[Poeticpiers]

our final line clashed with the tone of the rest of your writing but somehow brought the whole thing into focus

This is a powerful piece. I have to agree with the others you chosen great words that aren't used. Great poem!

[Brette Medb]

Powerful piece. I liked the comparisons to science and faith which despite the hype from both sides of the other being wrong aren't really that far off from one another. Great write and I loved the last line.


Brette

[lilain]

So much said and conveyed in this brief poem. I can feel the spiraling march along with the curiosity of the unknown. I believe this is the first poem I've read of yours and you should continue posting them. All of your work is so deep in philosophical queries and even in the brevity of this poem, I sense your depth.

Well done! I'm looking forward to reading more (when you post).

Cheers,
A

[Amanda Naomi]

You have a real talent with words! I love the last line "prayed to God that I'm not being screwed." it made me laugh

I love your choice of words: oblique and exhumed for instance, i feel that people have forgotten that there are better words out there! keep up the good work, i look forward to reading more of your work!

[phantom]

That question at the end is wierdly wonderful sometime I think we all hope to God we arent being screwed. Really nice poem

[Legion]

Wonderfully done. Going in my favorites. Loved the question at the end. Couldn't have ended better.