Screams

Whispers echo throughout the night,

Almost voices although not quite,

Secrets and lies tempting you near,

Screams and cries fill you with fear.

 

Whimpers are heard within the trees,

Stories and pain passed through the leaves,

Violence and horror trapped in the ground,

Love and hope is asleep and sound.

 

Terror in the shadows hovering the street,

Edging you just to take a peak,

Squeals and laughter from everywhere,

Tormenting you without a care.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Havent been on in forever,
all comments welcome

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

Is this a Halloween themed write? I wasn't sure! I haven't been on in agesssss either friend! Your initial word choice is great, my only criticism is that as each lines goes on and becomes a rhyming couplet, some flow is often lost. Don't feel like things NEED to rhyme, t can taint the power of some great writes! However, with the eerie theme, perhaps your rhyming flow works.. Anyway, I do like this, and urge you to keep up the writing. :)

[oh,hey.]

thanks for the advice x

[Moniba]

Wonderful rhymes here! I liked the poem just as it is...

[oh,hey.]

thank you very much :)

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱
Having very good hearing most of my life, my doctor pointed something out to me the last time we visited.

"David, a dog that stays home barks at his fleas."

I asked him what does that mean ?
He said think about it.
So - I did and finally I said, if I didn't listen so intently to the silence, I wouldn't hear voices in it ?
He nodded, yes, that's it.

So - to people who do hear spirits and moans and groans in the wind and such, just realize, it's your imagination and creative cognitive processes that filter noise into substance. Like when you can receive and hear a television signal coming from your arm when you are next to a box fan. It happens.

But - it doesn't have to. Don't spend so much time in the dark and stillness. There's a bright, beautiful, wonderful world out there, and not only do you need it, but it needs you ...

I well understand what you are saying here, Elliet. And if you are experiencing these things, you need to consider a little therapy. I have, I do, and will continue to do so, and it really =DOES= help. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Willow has a point. Rhyme sometimes boxes us in. Anyway a nice Halloween write in any case. Peek not Peak in the final stanza.

[oh,hey.]

thank youuuu

[K]

Great work, really enjoyed reading it:)
And please do check my works too as I am new and your reviews would encourage me alot.

Thankyou. and Keep it up. :)

[Dayran]

Quite an observation of that one ... in us ... who sees the shadows and hears the whispers. Helps us to get to know her better ... and perhaps wonder about her expectations. Nice knowing you.

[oh,hey.]

Thankyouuuu

[Leslie Philibert]

A good poem, I would have liked to have read the story behind the lines, the motives, the background, so put some framework in, emotions alone don`t carry poignancy !

[Missy Lorraine]

Wow. Sounds like a winner to me!! It is so simple, yet complicated.
"Whispers echo throughout the night,
Almost voices although not quite"
This is my favorite couplet!! It has such a great ring to it.

[oh,hey.]

ahahaha thankyou, i'll be sure to read some of your work :)