Create Me

Create me
As I stand before you.

Draw the very lips
You wish to fall in love with.
Pop in the eyes that
Will always leave you in a daze.
Mold out the curves that
You would love to touch.
The perfect tongue that
Could gracefully caress yours with each kiss.

Create me
As I stand before you.
I'm all yours.
Just yours.

Reviews

[Kye R H]

Absolutely beautiful work! It feels weightless, but has so much depth.
We are all shaped by the people around us, but willing for it to happen or being conscious of it implies a whole other experience. The sort of love you feel here is made clear, and I'm sure all those who have felt this form of love recognize it immediately.
Thanks for sharing this!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Amusing write, much enjoyed!

[aidan otoole]

i love the line
"Draw the very lips
You wish to fall in love with."
very beautiful, the idea of perfection is always interesting to hear about, i find. beautiful flow :)

[Frozen Eyes]

Excellent thought. You sound like a blank canvas waiting to filled with colours n end up into a masterpiece. Loved it :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

"I am all yours. Just yours "--the ending that shows a perfect surrender to the one you love.
Great piece. Simple yet tells a great emotion. I enjoyed reading it.

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This is really great:) It's such an artistically created piece. It's a type of writing that I feel people can relate to in many different ways. Well done.

[PadfootBlack]

Excellent. I love the description here, and the flow is smooth. The final line of the second stanza seems out of place to me (that very well may have been intentional), it just seems to break the flow and pattern of the lines before it. a fantastic poem

[Ama May Cooper]

This is truely breathtaking... what an image conjoured of true love and affection :) A heart giving itself fully to be edited and molded to even the most astethic of desires... a fantastic right

[willweb]

This is extremely beautiful. Such a nice feeling comes from this piece. I enjoyed your poem today Svetlana

[Pax]

quite intriguing and almost seductive, as if you are pull to the birth of your new masterpiece... i like it my friend, great job!

[Conor Larkin]

This is a really beautiful, interesting piece. It makes me think of the sensation of forming the image of a character in one's mind as one reads. Although it definitely goes beyond that in terms of its eroticism. I would say it is indicative of love in its ideal, in which one surrenders oneself to recreation in the eyes of another.