trick or treat

You frightened me last night.

No sooner

had I crawled in under cold covers

then --

there you were

standing in the hall

gazing so intently.

 

As I startled,

 

I realized

that I never heard you

come up the stairs.

 

And then you vanished

without a word

 

Reviews

[Angel Bird]

What a great write - it conjures two scenarios to me - one very frightening with a ghost BOO!!! ...according to the season of course but also another one where the husband/partner comes home late at night, gathers a few things, looks back at his wife/partner says a silent "So long..." and vanishes out of her life...

Only a few words you needed to paint this whole picture - marvelous. I truly like it.

[emmajoy]

A picture of words and creepy with it .. love the way you've painted your words into a mysterious ending .. so right for the time of year .. though the poem would stand an entire year and more!

[Crowley]

Wondering if they were still there upon second glance....what would the outcome be? This one made me think....and a great title in light of the season. Great work

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. only you can wield words and emotions so beautifully ... amazed yet again and inspired yet again ... :) ...

[Wondering Mind]

I mentioned that you will the words to your will...Multiple scenes are cast in such few words.

[Ramiz Ilham Khan]

oh wow - such a Hitchockian way of saying, 'Did you ever love me ?'' - ''Were you ever there for me ?'' - Wonderful :-)

[Lola Nation]

very nice....

good play on the trick/treat

[WildeWhore]

good good good good
I think the "trick or treat" means here whether the intruder is friendly or sinister.. right? Like, a lover tottering off to bed, or a ghost wafting through the halls?
so, yes it's mysterious... not so it loses its meaning, or drive.

[Tony]

As you started what? running like hell? Who scared who? this is great, I can think of so many meanings to this.
I like the anticipation you put out here. I will finish this up in my own mind.

Tony

[Lilith des Cavernes]

:-) I like that... It's haunting.

[Ed Hart]

(some)body practicing for Halloween, eh? oooh, all under the covers, are we?