Falling

Falling

A Poem by Sugar and Spice

I'm gonna fall now,
and if I fall I'm gonna fall far.
My feet no longer have the strength to carry me, 
My tears are falling.
If only I were a bird, 
Then I could spread my wings and be free of this world.
My heart cannot bare the pain,
Inside the scars you made are breaking.
Why is there no rewind button?
Why can't I go back to the start and walk away?
If your plan was to hurt me, well done you suceeded,
You must be so proud.
You knocked the breath out of me,
You made me feel alive.
I'm gonna go now, I really am,
Nothing you can say can make this better.
I need to dry my cheeks and move on.
You tore me from the inside,
And for that I am gone.

© 2011 Sugar and Spice


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It's another painful write, love's floating in the piece but the pain... ! The pain's too surviving in the write in you. Anybody who does love always get some hurt once a time it's a piece and i got the feel of it, that's what i got from the piece. Nice flow of ink.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I really enjoyed the emotions in your write, I can feel the sorrow. I love the feeling that you don't give up, there is hope left. Amazing write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh so sorrowful, this is wonderfull written love! A beautiful conveyance of the emotions xoxo

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

When we know we are "falling" there are things we can do for ourselves to break the fall. As long as we can get back up, wipe ourselves off, and walk again, we will be fine. Good work here poet.

Renee ♥

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

and line 11 "well done" needs to be separated

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

line three "have" is misspelled
line four "falling" is misspelled

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm speechless at this poem. I am simply going to say that this is yet another beautifully penned poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sugar and Spice
Sugar and Spice

Melbourne, Victoria, Australia



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