I still remember you (Love poem #6)

just a low effort love poem

I still remember you
 although our time was brief.

That summer of twenty-twenty-two
 then you snuck away like a thief.

You could see
 only half of me,
the other half I kept concealed.

Broken parts,
 a string of hearts,
  and places that haven’t healed.

I’ve seen you unclothed
 I’ve seen you unloved
  I’ve seen you dancing in the street.

What if I could hold you now?
 What if, what if, somehow;
  What if we never meet?

 

I suppose you have forgotten me,
 that’s probably for the best.
Just a shadow of a memory
 lodged somewhere inside your chest.

Author's Note

wishing everyone a happy holidays. this is just one of my cheeky love poems. i thought something fairly light would be fitting for the season.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poet's wealth. Memories.
"Just a shadow of a memory
lodged somewhere inside your chest."
I did like the above lines. The poetry. Honest, direct and hard. My kind of poetry. Thank you Ernest for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Gee]

Not sure about the "low effort" There are many who would gladly grab this and be more than pleased if their work.
Love can hurt :))
Good morning Ern.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Gee!
this poem just really came to me, which is strange as rhyming isn't my default. glad you enjoyed it. see you around,

Ern.

[andrew mitchell]

Lovely writing Ern, much enjoyed.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thaks Andrew. happy new year, and i hope to see you around often.

[andrew mitchell]

I will, I enjoy your writings

[Betty Hermelee]

a very heartfelt poem...when love disappears it is painful...sometimes anger reveals itself, surely memories are going to be mixed between some sweet ones and some sorrowful ones...it definitely leaves scars....and shadows which will linger...
nicely written ERN
Warmly, B

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks B. i've been away for a little while and i've been missing your works and comments. i hope you had a pleasant holidays, and im glad you liked this piece.

Ern.

[Betty Hermelee]

Lovely piece, I really like your writing, and your reviews!!!
Always a pleasure!
Warmly
B🌷

[Kelly Scheppers]

"I have seen you unclothed,
I have seen you unloved..."

And no doubt you have seen every scar and know its origin. We can attribute that to love. It only makes us remember what the heart cannot forget.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

im not sure we'll ever get to see every scar on another person, but sometimes i recognise hurt even when it goes unspoken. i hope my next romance is one where we don't talk about the past and look forward instead.

thanks for reading. catch you again soon.

[Trace]

I can relate to this on several different levels.
N nicely penned.

Trace

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Trace. i'm glad you felt something here.
hope to see you again soon. regards,

Ern.

[Stella Armour]

Not cheeky at all , but an open and honest regret that she only knew you in part and not the broken soul side that you kept from her.
Forgotten.... maybe not , if it is your destiny she will find you again.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

destiny is a funny thing. i know it all too well. whatever the universe has in plan for me i will accept and do my best. thank you for your encouraging words. kindly,

Ern.

[Ken e Bujold]

well you may find it cheeky, the truth is something much more Ern. The universal theme is squarely fixed as to become your own. Rhythm is fantastic, dare I say hypnotic. And the diction dances that fine line between melancholy and treacle without ever once toeing over the edge, cascading down into the mundane.

great poem

ken

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Ken. i guess its for me cheeky because my other writing is relatively heavier and less autobiographic. i wanted here to talk about a side of me i dont usually reveal - as romantic and sentimental as the next person. but im glad you could relate to it and even see something universal about this work. an episode of my life, something i dont look back on with much regret.

Ern.

[Joli Dy]

If this is light, I need to check myself. I'm probably reading it in a heightened emotional state.
"I’ve seen you unclothed
I’ve seen you unloved
I’ve seen you dancing in the street.

What if I could hold you now?
What if, what if, somehow;
What if we never meet?"
This hit me where I live. It's lovely, Ern. So lovely.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks Joli. for me, it was a peaceful afternoon in a cafe penning this. i guess im used to things so much worse than a relationship not happening that this is comparatively light. not a good thing, of course.
but thank you for reading. your comments really help me to understand what i worte.

[Joli Dy]

Truly hope you are well.

[Starr]

WOW! I can feel this write, so full of emotion. Nicely written. I really like this

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thank you!!

[Desert Knave]

I like it. I keep a lot of me hidden from anyone I run into and it would take a lot for someone to get me to be fully open. ~Jim

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

thanks for reading Jim. and thank you for sharing your thoughts. i have also recently decided that i am not going to talk about a lot of these things that have happened. it might be better this way.