Time

Poem

They say time heals all
But I'm not sure if I buy it
I can't re-seal this hole you left
but i can atleast try it

I remember every time we had
Sometimes I think I'm crazy
I cycle through the good, the bad
And none of it gets hazy

I remember every feature
Every detail of your face
And when you walked into the room
It felt like divine grace

I guess we'll chalk it up to love
The strongest I've seen yet
But everything good has an end
And there's better I bet

I'll have to move on
As bad as it pains me
This love has grown cold
I've been as hurt as can be

So they say time heals all
But I'm not sure if I buy it
I can't re-seal this hole you left
But I can atleast try it

Reviews

[Dushyant Thadani]

Good rhyme, and good feelings. I enjoyed reading it, but if you wish to rhyme, it should be continuous. That's what I believe. I suggest you can try expanding your vocabulary. The message you tried to give was beautiful, and you did justice to it. Great job.

[Archia]

I like the story behind this. The rhyme also was really nicely done, it didn't seem forced and created a nice flow to it. Oh and I think it was good how you twisted round to common idea 'time heals all.'

[Drey Mitchell]

Simple but powerful.

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Comes across like a song..your rhyme is solid..although the meter is a little jumpy in places..a word removed here and there though would put paid to that..the idea that time doesn't heal..is just something that you have to give time to see LOL..now theres irony in that! Thought provoking read.

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. beautifully written ... expressive and poignant ... i personally think that time doesn't heal anything ... it steals everything ... and it's a constant tussle with time that defines life ... but what do i know ... maybe i'll get lucky and start thinking differently one day ...

[loowzerX]

I hear you. What a great write! well done. fav part: "Sometimes I think I'm crazy " -> maybe..but hey, as long as it's just crazy you're ok =)

[Wondering Mind]

Time gets us all in the end, I think that's what they meant by "heal"

[Ruth]

Time is a tyrant to many! This is a beautiful portrayal of how time can be our master, even though its really an illusion!
Great work
xx

[Misty Blue Eyes]

aww. i have the same feelings about my first love.. he left such a big hole in my heart it never really filled up and healed..

[Amit Parmessur]

I do suggest you submit a couple of your best works to Golden Apple. We'll certainly consider you if you are interested in being published.
We look at submissions the year round.
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Golden Apple Ezine Team
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[luciddreamer]

Heartbreaking yet hopeful.....enjoyed it :)
Peace
Robin