My Notebook

My Notebook

A Poem by Evan Kleve

My notebook sits
On my bedside table
A pen on the top
Waiting to be free

Free to write my thoughts for me
And let my emotions flow
Through the tip
When I need to get them out

Because I can't speak them
For one reason or another
Whether it be embarrassment
Or fear

Free to take my dreams
My wishes
My needs
Those I haven't told any one else

Because they wouldn't understand
For one reason or another
Whether it be immaturity
Or stupidity

My notebook is personal
Because I've confided to it
What no one else should see

© 2011 Evan Kleve


Author's Note

Evan Kleve
You guys, I need some help. I'm not sure what I want the last line to be. Suggestions?

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the title isn't as interesting as the poem.
the beautiful thing about this poem is the honesty, the authenticity.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like it just the way it is good job nice flow good read




Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Umm... I think the last line should be along the lines of:
"What no one else should see
Is still a part of me." or something like that.
This is a nice poem, even though its missing the last line :P

Posted 10 Years Ago


how about sum it up like

"What no one else should see
stays in my heart, as me"

This is wonderful, i enjoyed this.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great write! I think alot of writers can relate to this..you captured that feeling very well!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Personally, I would leave the poem as it is. It has lots of mystery about it, whereas that's ruined if you add an unnecessary line to the end. However, if you find the perfect fit, it will click. Oh, by the way, would you like to join my group? You can find it on my page... I think. I'm not very tech-savvy.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Firstly, I can absolutely relate to this poem. Writing in a small notebook, so no one else can see. Because you live in a world of words no one else could understand. This was very nicely written, and really nice to read. Excellent! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


very well writen

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Awsome!!! And i think the last line is perfect.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I think you should leave it as it is because it gives the poem a mysterious and amazing ending. :) *That's just my opinion* So, I really liked this writing. :)

~Lizzard~

Posted 10 Years Ago



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