Moods

sit there, arms folded about your knees

sit there and sulk

and still you are beautiful even when your mood

settles on your face like bad makeup

your glances dance with the fire of your anger

and your tongue spews threats and accusations

but your beauty shields me from all harm

and i find wonder even in your wrath

 

cry. . . . blackmail me with tears knowing my heart

is your ransom already paid

advertise your disappointment with a trembling lip

and sniff your sadness with jerky breaths

you will soon want refuge in my arms

and rest your head on my shoulder asking for promises

then there will be crumpled sheets and anguished gasps

as you lock me within your legs and lift your eyes to god

 

pout . . . .  no offense is greater than one against you

you know you seduce with a look over your shoulder

you use your beauty as a weapon and you invade at will

if i refuse, countless hearts are waiting for you to happen in

come, let us pretend again that all is well

and you can move upon me with clenched teeth

and whimper before you collapse upon my chest and lie about love

and i can believe it again and cherish a hope about someday

Reviews

[Tex]

I loved this.

Having dyslexia and having given up on learning in school I can not speak to construct, but I can speak to honesty, truth, the emotion the piece brings to the fore for me. It is all there.

The layers of dysfunction in this are fascinating. In my mind I see a man older than his lover, somewhat chauvinistic, dealing with his lover in a somewhat condescending way. But before we get a chance to feel sorry for her we learn that she is manipulative and uses her charms to get what she needs from the relationship. The two dance their dysfunctional dance in perfect step, it is a dance they have created and they know the steps well. All the same the lingering doubt remains, the truth can not be avoided. They are pretending. He is hoping, we get a sense of longing for honesty and something more authentic. We are left to wonder, is she playing him or does she feel the same? And, would he change the steps to this dance if given the opportunity?

Wonderful. Just pulls you right in.

If this is who you are... then how painful it must have been for you to review my poem. Thank you for being so nice about it.

[DrD]

Nicholas, I have become calloused to difficult things because yes, this is who I am. I am also very grateful for your marvelous review and insights.

[A. Amos]

Interesting write, thank you for sharing

[Scott Metro]

Beautiful !!!!!!
An excellent description of the struggle...
Very well woven.

Enjoyed.
Scott

[Tennessee]

Nice connections. I enjoyed how you related different moods to different concepts.

[DrD]

Thank you very much, Tennessee. Your last name wouldn't be Williams, would it?

[Tennessee]

Hahaha, you never know.

[Jack...]

So very beautiful my friend. You have captured the beauty of her moods, the little nuances that maker her...her. They way with merely a silent glance she can speak loudly to your heart. Very well done.

[DrD]

Thank you, Jack. I appreciate your visit and hope you return soon.

[Adambomb]

I've been looking for a poem like this for a while. Very honest and I feel very emotional reading this. I am especially moved by "and still you are beautiful even when your mood settles on your face like bad makeup." In my past relationship I see myself as very similar to this perspective. I was loving, possibly over loving, and very poorly expressed myself often. In the third stanza you write "you know you seduce with a look over your shoulder you use your beauty as a weapon and you invade at will," and I relate to this sentiment. I know the feeling that someone meticulously acts to evoke emotion. Maybe the universe works this way. Maybe we just see it this way. Great read and a beautiful poem!

[DrD]

You are very kind and I truly appreciate your visit and wonderful review.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Wonderful! I love this write! So well spoken!

[DrD]

Sorry for the delayed response, Josie but please remember you are always welcome here. Your kind comments were deeply appreciated.

[MsJewel]

There is an honesty about this poem that is so touching. I could tell this was written with love - to see someone - perhaps not in their best moments and then love them deeply touches my heart. This is lovely!

:) Julie

[DrD]

Thank you, Julie and a special thanks for your visit.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! DrD, this is beautiful as the speaker see her beauty even in her troubled time.
There's love...and with this magical feeling, there are many hopes and dreams created. Someone could be an angel to save her from her sadness...

I enjoyed reading this piece. Thanks for the share.

[DrD]

Thanks for your visit and I hope you return soon.

[gabrielle]

You captured the most avoided mood of a girl/woman in here, DrD. But what I relished in this piece is that the poetic voice could still see beauty amidst cranky moods. i am not trying to justify our moods but most of the time a woman could utter words she doesn't truly mean out of spite and it would only take a man of patience and understanding, to look beyond those hurtful tirades.

[DrD]

When you see through love, Gabriele, you see past many things. Thanks for visiting here and I truly appreciate your kind words.