"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land"   IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land" IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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i am missing Ms. Frieda and decided to re-post this poem which we did together .. i am so angry how one very nasty person was able to drive her from the Cafe :(

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Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land

Tapped upon a mushroom cap's fancy,
      to see if the rabbit hole was rumor
curiouser and curiouser
     about the unimaginable avenue,

She opens my mind and
fear grips my colors
from the hinterland .....                   tremors
wink    
           and blink   
                              and nod

As I sat upon my newfangled gumption
   common sense took a recess,
 spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd
     to my surprise, the scaramouch    
                 of a head talked back

my birthing in darkness
          musk and dank scent
knocks        my shroom
head explodes
            collide's scope intense

in his elegant persuasion,
made a date for half past daft
took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip
 alas,  we've lived happily ever after
upon a prime floating island in a cloud

clouds of words
spilling like rough gouged stones in
tumbler's majestic insane
forever now i
 

re-pronounce her name



beginning and



end... ;)

                      

© 2016 Einstein Noodle


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What a superb collaboration from you and dear, dear Frieda = yours are minds that walk the same space.. perhaps!

There's so much in this piece, the colour and highlights take the reader into a world of bewilderingly spaced.out somewhere. The phrasing you've used is another language, a magic not to be translated - and who would want to do that...all of us!

Lewis Carrol would undoubtedly want to join the two of you in another collab, happily sharing his enlightenment via any means - even holding the breath and flying off and away with the daisies. . Brava and brava again.. Loved this. Great musical accompaniment, by the way... ..

Posted 5 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

yes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will.. read more
emmajoy

3 Years Ago

STILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanitie.. read more



Reviews

You can imagine my reaction when I came to your page and saw this. I'm still laughing!! Wow!! And on top of that, the poem was good! Damn good! Unique structure and nice balance of free verse and rhyme. I love it! Not to mention the subject. I've been wondering what writes that interesting name I see pop up here and there. Meant to read you but the volume of it all here is a little overwhelming. I might spend the rest of the day reading you.....I'll be back

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

ahahaha William!! I was wondering if you would find this one .. so happy you did! you probably never.. read more
I'm late, I'm late for a very important date..

Are you the white rabbit? It feels like I'm running through a maze and that ending is such a bittersweet exit.

re-pronounce her name



beginning and



end... ;)


Just a beautiful collaboration between the two and how you both end up in the same place.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

you have made my day in finding this one and taking time to read, enjoy and share your thoughts. I l.. read more
I'd like to say some profound here, but WOW is what comes to mind. I went over it three times so it would sink in to a depth I could mull over some more. --- Great Poem!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

oh man! thank you so much ... so happy to dove in to garner all you could .. what better review has .. read more
To me this could be a metaphorical reference to drugs and drug addiction. Two great minds make one awesome poem

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

easy to see hints of Timothy Leary for sure .. but more about love and relationship and a certain bi.. read more
Well cut my bits off and call me. RITA!!! I have read this numerous times Sir E and am shocked and stunned to realise that I haven't commented on it. I'm sure I must have in a previous incarnation (nemo or distant horizons or something like that)
You took me there, man! To that magical, mystery place of flying submarines and sychaledi... Psychoderek. Colour filled imaginings more colourful than an explosion in a skittles factory. 😊💥😊
Your muse certainly let you off the leash on this one (which reminds me, say woof from me to beauregard)
A perfect piece of writing, from a mind truly unleashed. (No beau regard, I said unleashed... Its not time for walkies) 😊

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

Freida and i collaborated on several poems while she was here .. i am so amazed at the reception thi.. read more
this is so fun... when I saw the title it made me think of this.. 'einstein's idea" by johnny flynn
https://youtu.be/-oWB8f-Ov7k


a kind of alt alice adventure.. lol really nice


Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

thanks so much Jen! I appreciate your time spent to read and review ... will check that poem out for.. read more
That’s awful that she was driven from the Cafe! I’m so sorry about that! Poetry and writing is such a personal thing, and I’ve had my share of harsh, but fair reviews that hurt enough, so I can only imagine what intent cruelty would be like. But your poetry together, it works wonders. Your writing your entire, green, green world together, and it’s beautiful, colorful and imaginative! It’s taking you on an adventure as you read it, almost like I’m watching a movie! That’s how much vivid imagery you were able to fit here and I adored it and it’s all put together and flows so, so well. Thank you for giving me a burst of inspiration and chipping away that writers block I’ve been having, and you and Frieda writing together, you create a goldmine of strong words and beautiful storytelling.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

oh how i wish she would just visit the Cafe' from time to time .. just to read your review .. i am s.. read more
Vertigo Cat

6 Months Ago

It was my pleasure!
WOW now that I watched the video Mushroom Cloud (Which I love) I can match your magnificent poetry of St. Elsewhere, the magic, the mind opening to new dimensions; there is so much imagery in this poem, I feel like I'm there in the dark void. Really good, music and dance too.
Best,
Betty

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thank you for mentioning the video ... its crazy good isn't it?! and thank you for reading and takin.. read more
This is a magical poem. Takes the reader on a mystical trip trying to make their own view of how this land of mushrooms clouds could be like.. An impression of awe and beauty that exceeds common sense. It is unfortunate to hear about her departure.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thanks so much for taking time Rick! yes.. Frieda is missed by a lot of people around here. :( nice .. read more
Archishman Rick

7 Months Ago

You're welcome 🙏 Hoping y'all have the much desired and awaited reunion soon.
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

oh... she has been gone a long time now .. i'm afraid she will not return. I use to be in touch with.. read more
Very nice. And so sorry to hear about Freda. Yes, people can be so cruel. And poetry is such a personal, intimate thing that for many, nasty criticism can hurt so deeply. I've received my own share of such criticism, but fortunately, I have a very thick skin.

Now as to the poem's execution and content. This is brilliantly woven together. I love the many Alice in Wonderland references and how you've turned them to personal, internals references and meaning. Very nicely done. High marks.

Rick

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thanks Rick .. trolls can be relentless .. Frieda just had enough of it .. we had a run of them back.. read more
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

ps. a big difference between constructive and destructive criticism isn't there?! peace and joy my n.. read more

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