"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land"   IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land" IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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i am missing Ms. Frieda and decided to re-post this poem which we did together .. i am so angry how one very nasty person was able to drive her from the Cafe :(

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Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land

Tapped upon a mushroom cap's fancy,
      to see if the rabbit hole was rumor
curiouser and curiouser
     about the unimaginable avenue,

She opens my mind and
fear grips my colors
from the hinterland .....                   tremors
wink    
           and blink   
                              and nod

As I sat upon my newfangled gumption
   common sense took a recess,
 spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd
     to my surprise, the scaramouch    
                 of a head talked back

my birthing in darkness
          musk and dank scent
knocks        my shroom
head explodes
            collide's scope intense

in his elegant persuasion,
made a date for half past daft
took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip
 alas,  we've lived happily ever after
upon a prime floating island in a cloud

clouds of words
spilling like rough gouged stones in
tumbler's majestic insane
forever now i
 

re-pronounce her name



beginning and



end... ;)

                      

© 2016 Einstein Noodle


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What a superb collaboration from you and dear, dear Frieda = yours are minds that walk the same space.. perhaps!

There's so much in this piece, the colour and highlights take the reader into a world of bewilderingly spaced.out somewhere. The phrasing you've used is another language, a magic not to be translated - and who would want to do that...all of us!

Lewis Carrol would undoubtedly want to join the two of you in another collab, happily sharing his enlightenment via any means - even holding the breath and flying off and away with the daisies. . Brava and brava again.. Loved this. Great musical accompaniment, by the way... ..

Posted 6 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

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Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

yes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will.. read more
emmajoy

4 Years Ago

STILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanitie.. read more



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This read like a fun poetic fairy tale. A fine collaboration.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

we had so much fun writing it together ... Freida is much missed here at the Cafe' ... by many and a.. read more
I loved how you played with words here. Definitely a trip down a Rabbit hole.

I enjoyed the trip.

Scott

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thanks Scott!
E.
I wasn’t aware that someone was treated in such a way they had to leave - how saddening that is. Love the spacey poem.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

well ... s**t happens as we say eh!? it is a sad and sorry thing .. i miss Ms. Frieda very much .. a.. read more
commedia dell'arte
delicious nonsense that makes perfect sense as long as you sit upon a mushroom
I had so much fun reading this, thank you to both of you for the fun "trip"

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

and thank you for reading and reviewing .. we had fun writing it ..
EN enjoyed the ride. Very Lewis Carrollesque, with a delicious bit of depth to reward the reader who pays attention

ken e

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thank you so much for reviewing ... i am honored and thrilled you enjoyed the ride .. and looked a b.. read more
Wonderfully foreign and abstract

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

thanks for taking time Ranger Kessel! glad you enjoyed! :)
E.
This reminds me of John Lennon telling a fan who showed up at his house that he wasn’t this guy’s answer, that all he did was play around with words.
There is a lot to say about playing with words-wasn’t it Shakespeare who said the play is the thing?

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

ahahahaha .. i am so happy you took time to read this one sir!! yes ... the stage .. players .. ligh.. read more
To this refers to how we shouldn't make decisions right after a tragedy. We must wait for the fog of grief to lift.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thank you for taking time my friend! interesting take on this .. it was all done in fun and neither .. read more
On first read, this was too much for my not-yet-entirely-awake brain this morning. I read it again. More images appeared. I read two or three pages of reviews and comments. I read it a third time. I watched the video. Wow! This is getting good. I read it a fourth time, much more slowly, stopping at every word. Such a mind-blowing experience to be had from the imagery you and Frieda have woven here! Then, for fun, and in keeping with the idea of the poem, I read it backwards. If you ignore the syntactical anomalies, it is equally as powerful! You and Frieda created an abstract painting of “clouds of words…like rough gouged stones” that can be appreciated from any angle!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

WOW! how you felt this my new found friend...if i may call you that?? :) how so many miss dear Ms. F.. read more
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

ps. .. super happy you watched that video!!!!
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LJW
I have been gone awhile and do not know your friend but if it was the cranky talentless old man hack who thinks he's a bona fide literary critic that lurks around looking for a mark to insult I'm truly sorry.

This read like a mushroom trip and I liked it! Very reminiscent of Lewis Carrol.the imagery is fantastic!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

well ... welcome back! it very well could be the same culprit .. i do not know .. people like that h.. read more

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