She took..

I'm crumbling away.

I don't understand.

I can see you no longer?

My heart feels like sand...

 

A friendship I thought was perfect,

took from my reach too soon.

Jelous over nothing?

She took away my moon.

 

She took away my sun.

She took away my smile.

She took away my only reason,

I have not ran for miles.

 

She took away the twinkling eyes

of a friend I really love.

She took away the perfect voice

of the angel from above.

 

She left me with nothing.

No happiness to my name.

He's gone forever now.

I'm going slightly insane.

 

I still have the flowers

you picked from the ground.

I still have the text from when

you invited yourself around.

 

I've still got the lighters

of which yourself you didn't trust.

I've still got the orange rock

still covered with sandy dust.

 

The lake shall no longer ripple.

The corn field will no longer sway.

The birds will soon stop singing

because She took him away.

Author's Note

A really close friend of mine text me last night saying he can never talk to me again because his girlfriend (who he is now engaged to) hated the fact he would text me when he got bored and hang out with me when there was nothing to do. She got jelous of a simple friendship, and now we shall not be friends. He refuses to talk to me.

Jelousy.. such an awful thing =/

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to be in a middle of a relationship. I learn with old age. If someone want you. Don't have to lock them down. A poem with a sad story. Hard to lose a friend. Over a small thing can make it harder. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jeremy Baker]

The rhythm gives this poem a very musical quality, and the message itself is sad and desparing. Sad to say that you are right: jealousy is needless and destroys everything. NIce job!

[Bertie]

Could very easily be lyrics to a song, full of clarity and emotion.
The way you write about it does make it seem like it's more than a friendship even though it's not...
It's a very difficult situation but you've expressed it clearly and you seem very engaged with your own feelings which can't help but to produce good writing.
Well done :)

[lifesmith]

having been in this situation a dozen times before I can absolutely relate to this...an ugly emotion that words alone are insufficient to express

[Kenneth The Poet]

Coming from the other end, being the insecure one, it's hard to get over that emotion and she probably doesn't want to lose the best thing that has ever happened to her. I am defending her behavior, just giving you the wisdom to understand. You did well here, Jenny Bear, so keep it up. It sucks that you lost your friend.

[Ruth]

It is an ugly emotion..people do not conceive that we can be just friends, do they?!
Powerfully voiced love
xx

[Smokey]

I like it, long and hauntingly tragic. Seemed slightly melodramatic, but of course it probably would to someone who wouldn't understand. Ive read some of your other stuff, you show true understanding of dark emotional extensities, keep writing :)

[compositionc]

That's so sad. It's heartbreakingly so.Your rhyme scheme is wonderfully done. The flow and word usage is amazing. I really feel your pain.

[HappyTaylor]

I'm so sorry... That girl must not love herself very much.... None the less, this a a heartbreaking, but beautiful poem.

[Lily Mae]

I hate that more then anything and I never use that word.. Never ever give up who you are for anyone is my motto.. I left my friends behind when I got married and ended up hating and resenting him later for it.. So I know how you feel.. hopefully he'll wake up soon.. goodluck..xo