You're the cause.

The flowers are dead.

My heart put to bed.

Get out of my head.

My eyes are all red.

I gnoring what he said.

The feelings he led.

The heartbreak he spread.

Like butter on bread.

He used to be my ted.

My heart was never fed.

And now I need med.

Because of you.

You left too soon.

I love you too?

It's just not cool.

My feelings go 'boo'.

What can I do?

My heart needs glue.

Broken in two.

Left for who?

Unable to fix.

My emotions all mixed.

Put together like sticks.

Pushed over for kicks.

My heart he picks?

My love her nicks.

Each second it ticks.

 

No time...

              No love...

                            No care...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I like the flow of words. The flow of words and story made this poem a pleasure to read. No weakness in the poem. Just amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Enjoy]

I kinda liked it. Being a fan of rhyme myself, I enjoy to see an etude such as this [a musical term if you'll forgive me] where you flex your literary muscles. Flex away, I enjoyed it.
Well done.

[M.Babu]

The rhymes felt abit unnatural (my opinion) but i think the message itself was authentic. The feeling of the persona (you) was definitely there and thus it made an interesting read:)

~M.Babu~

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I think the rhymes distract from the poem. Rather than being about the emotions, it's about trying to rhyme a lot of consecutive lines, and it takes away the meaning, especially since the rhymes seem forced and overdone in places. Definitely seems like a fun piece to write, though.

[Ruth]

Wonderfully worded love, so sorrowful but colourful xx

[Linear]

Nothing l can see is wrong with your rhyming skills.
This is a well worked poem and i njoyed reading it, sad What love can do

[Bertie]

The almost childish voice adopted in this heightens the sense of hurt and confusion and the rhymes place emphasis on all the right words.
Very clever, I liked it :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Devilish and angsty yet wonderful.

[joshua deathdealer]

I've never been able to write in scales such as this. You do it very well. Awesome write.

[ivizarx]

Love the minimalistic structure. Really kicka** mate. Love also the flow of the poem, it's got a real good pace going (it dies in some areas, like around line 5 and 11, could use some tightening, which is very hard to do). I really enjoyed it though, it's very awesome. keep up the good work, you got one hell of a talent, thnx for the RR. :)