My Dream Takes Shape

Another shape poem.

          Was

            it really just last night? I dreamt that I had my son's                 wife

            pleading, begging for her very life? Down on her knees,        at 

                the point of a gun, apologizing for everything wrong     she  had

         ever  done.     As    the cops 

             stormed          in their guns 

 drawn, saying ma' am  don't 

             do this  please drop 

    your gun. What?  

      I proudly said, 

     raising the gun

     to my head and

    squirting myself

    right in the face,

   with colored water

    and bits of paint.

   Make this wretch

who's lied to me finally 

  answer truthfully?

Reviews

[knightcall]

very cool structure

[Bailey C. Writing]

I realized it was shaped like a gun after like, two minutes. I'm so slow. But that is a really cool format.
And it matches the poem, the poem that's full of power and intensity. Raw emotion...very good write.

[John Fakler]

clever and unexpected love the gun shape poetry it is a really cool idea

[Helpless]

wow, amazing descriptions and creativity!

[FallenWingz]

thats a gun shape, hope you not planning on using it...

on with my review...full of raw emotion and angst... always good to read your work.

[Daytonight]

Great write and awesome form! Well done! Kudos! Keep on penning.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

What an artist you are.........very cool!

[Peggy Gildon]

Wow how cool is that! Great words great shape.. What an artist you are.

[ImagineItAll]

I like how this is formatted to fit the theme of the poem. It's a very interesting poem too. I didn't expect it to go where you took it.

[Raven Starhawk]

The body of this is formatted to perfection and I can find harsh reflections in this poem that closely resemble a few in my own life. It feels like your emotions can very well be my own at a certain point.