When She Departed

May be you're thinking

I still love you, Let me know you that I don't.

Want me to care? Well, I won't.

May be you're thinking

I'm still holding on to something.

May be you're thinking I'll come back to you, but I ain't ever.

Letting me down,

you left me alone forever.

I was sorry for my mistake,

Begged for the second chance,

Ignoring me on the street, you didn't let your mercy enhance.

I followed you like a dog for the bone,

you kicked me down and left me all alone.

May be one day you'll realize you should've give me second chance, and now you won't be able to see the glimpse of my glans.

Reviews

[Zephyr]

The frankness with which you write amazes me, Farhan....
Enjoyed your work:)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks so much 😊 it means a lot

[Zephyr]

My pleasure......

[AshlynnStyx]

Maybe is one word and glans is glance. I love this poem otherwise. Good job.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you..

[prachi prangya agasti]

Simple outburst of emotions it is.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Yes, thank you for review

[Giulia King]

This poem holds a lot of anger. I feel like if you don't get a second chance, try to move on. Never hold a grudge or anger against anyone.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Well there's nothing to hold on, moved on from this years ago. Btw thanks for your kind words

[Writing Angel]

This is so true and so relatable...touching truthful.... perfect I loved this

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank youu soo much I'm glad to hear that

[Writing Angel]

Thank you for writing this

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct words my friend.
"I followed you like a dog for the bone,
you kicked me down and left me all alone.
May be one day you'll realize you should've give me second chance, and now you won't be able to see the glimpse of my glans."
I did like the above lines. Thank you Farhan for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Farhan.

[Sonakshi Arora]

This was an amazing write and indeed so true! Great work :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you sonakshi

[Sonakshi Arora]

My pleasure :D

[Lovecraft]

This poem certainly caught my attention. It's heartfelt, emotional and bitter-sweet and you captured the sad part of being in love quite effectively and accurately. It's a very good poem. :)

I suggest you edit this as there are a number of grammar problems and spelling errors throughout the poem. Also the last line in your first stanza doesn't make much sense. But besides the grammar and spelling errors I can find nothing bad about this poem.

One last thing: Did you mean to write "glans"? Or did you mean "Glance"?

Overall, it's a good poem and I enjoyed reading it. :)

Just make sure to carefully read your poems a couple times so you can correct any mistakes you make. I almost always read it several times over just to make sure I didn't make any mistakes. ;)

I'm sorry if I come across as a "corrector" or a "know-it-all", I just want to see you improve in regards to grammar. You have quite a bit of talent. :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you I'll make it right now

[Farhan Shaikh]

I'm glad that someone like you helps me whenever there's mistake in my work, I'll read my work couple of times before posting..

[Valentine]

There are plenty of fish in the sea. Try someone new, it could be better. Valentine

[Farhan Shaikh]

Yea miss valentine

[APOORVA]

a learning, a delight to read :)
wow!
you have an ability ti bind your reader

[Farhan Shaikh]

thank you so much