Light in the Dark

 

 

Shining bright,

Shining true,

The Light in the Dark

Is surely You,

This could be a poem

Of Earthly Love,

But I want more,

To rise above,

Because God is great,

He madeth me,

Ever so kind,

He made me free,

He madeth the sun,

He madeth the night,

Though surrounded in darkness,

He art the light,

I know that

Love is in Him,

Anything can be done

Upon his single whim,

Because He loved me,

I will constantly try,

To escape this darkness,

Until the day that I die.

Author's Note

I wrote this a while ago, back when I was in a much more "poetic" mood, and I'm more than open for judgements and criticisms. :)

Reviews

[Deseret]

this is very sweet and well written, i have a couple nitpicky things to say thought, first of all, in the sixteenth line you say "he art the light" i think that is a grammatical error, because art is the equivalent of are, the other thing is that "because he loved me" and that is in the past tense, and i would think that that should be in the present tense, (unless of course you meant it to be that way :-) ) and it is really a very nice poem, and very inspirational and sweet and you obviously felt it, i wish that i could write that deeply so easily, for me it takes forever and a day. Great job.

oh and you should continue to post your stuff.

[sabrina]

Wow, that's really good, but I'n not that great at explaining why. Keep on writing!

[[untitled]]

I think it's very inspirational. Thank you for sharing.