My Love is Lost

This is both my first long length poem, and my first decent love poem. Don't ask about the first one since it will most likely never be posted. I could use some opinions on this since it's a first.

Words cannot express the pain I feel
Realizing that you leaving was not a dream but real
Looking up at the stars I can't help but wonder
What I did to tear our love asunder

Now, without you here my body is cold
So this is the pain of which my father once told
Trails of tears stream down my face
Looking for you but finding no trace

Losing her is a fate worse than death
And so as I take in my final, mournful breath
I find myself still loving you even as I tire
But me being alive is sadly not required

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

So much raw Emotion.

and you did an amazing Job

so sad but so lovely and Beautiful
as if your dreams were ripped away from you
and you were asleep and wake to find
it wasn't a dream after all.

I feel a poem stirring in me this is
why I love reading others writes they
are very Inspiring I will post a Poem called
was I dreaming Inspired by this write thank you.

sad but very Heartfelt and can feel the strong
Emotion here and that
you spoke your at most heart.


Thank you for sharing this Wonderful piece.

Blessings. Kindred poet

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Send me a request when you finish writing it and I'll be glad to read it. Thanks for the vote of confidence.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

I can do that :) You're very welcome. It's my Pleasure. Blessings. Kindred poet