Swank (Bowie inspired)

The holidays aren't good for me, so I spent the night dancing in the dark to TIME by David Bowie, (Who got his name from the Bowie Knife) On repeat, this is the result.

Swank to the floor

My ears are covered

So I hear nothing except you

Dancing in front of the mirror,

In the dark,

So I can picture myself any way I want

Any way I need to…

I close my eyes and move

No longer fearing the dark

I hold my knife close to my heart

Protecting myself from the horrors of the world.

Monsters try to bring me back to reality,

Turn on the light

And open my eyes

Forcing me to see what really stares back from the mirror

Knife protect me,

Bring me to safety.

Back to this gothic but garish look I adore

Wrap me in your melody

Carry me until My feet are far from the ground

Until my voice is in sync with yours

Continuously until nothing else matters

Until the tears are gone

And I do not clutch my chest in pain.

My Knife My Knife,

Protecting me always,

Leading me to good places,

My knife,

Delivering me from a world of strife. 

Reviews

[Christoph Poe]

I don't know why, but these single lines stood out the strongest to me:

"So I hear nothing except you
Dancing in front of the mirror"

This was your attention getter: I loved the deadly arrogance behind these words. I think you could give us more, though, than what you did to follow it up. If you ever get the time to exercise, try doing this: write simply scenery. Give us something to look at, but don't give us a subject. Do not include yourself or anyone else by saying "I" or "him" and see what you come up with. I bet it will turn out interesting if not near amazing.

Keep up the great work! I'm really liking it. :)

--Chris

[Kupendwa]

Woah. This is a powerful one. Great job, Fish.

[Fish]

Thank you Kupe :3

[Kupendwa]

No problemo :D

[sithlordjp]

I stopped by for Bowie... I stayed for your words! Absolutely love the rhythm of this piece. The kinfe... altering between protector and savior. "Forcing me to see what really stares back from the mirror" : this is great.

[Fish]

Awh thank you so much :] It seems I write best when listening to Bowie.. so.. almost all the time haha XD Well, in a way he is my protector and savior, while most people run to others for help or comfort, I run to his music and it cures all :) Thank you so much ^.^