Awake

Beauty lies within a seed.

Words on a page
Actors on a stage
Paint on a canvas
The walking dead among us

How many come and how many go
With the river's current we flow
How many walk past the rose
Without contemplating the stories it knows

Changing as a river's stream
So many forgetting to stop and dream
Zombies going through the motion
Rather than feeling through the emotion

To grow is to change, instead of remaining the same
Wild and free, the wind rustling the horse's mane
Sunset over the ocean, bare feet in the sand
Not alone, but in solitude, awakened I stand

Reviews

[Matthew Bosko]

So many of us are sleep walking, This is a really nice piece.

-Matt

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you Matt! :-)

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I LIKE this one.
You know I like your work anyway but this is a different style to most of your work.
I love the way it sings as you read it.
Interesting observations. It's true most people pass by just like zombies, never noticing the world around them.
You have truly risen as your name suggests, LIKE A PHOENIX.
Best wishes.
Clive.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Risen indeed and burst into flames and risen again. Thank you so much for your kind words!

[Bluefire]

I love this poem. Zombies are awesome!
I like the rhyme and wordplay, the thought and easiness, the imagery and story.
Bleh! The whole thing!
Well done. ^^

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you so much Bluefire!

[Bluefire]

You're welcome!

[MagicAl]

Love the flow of this, and the inspirational meaning behind it. Good write.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you and I'm pleased that you enjoyed!

[Lyn Anderson]

Once again, you have captured my imagination and my heart.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Aw--thank you KL for making my day!

[just Penny]

The cycle of life and the only constant being change. You capture this perfectly in your poem. I love the line "so many forgetting to stop and dream" - so true. I agree with the final stanza that we all change, whether it's growth or regression I don't know, but we do all change. Your final line is excellent. Well written ! Penny

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you Penny! I truly appreciate your reviews :-)

[Madalyn Beck]

I love the flow of this. Beautifully penned! I love the imagery you described, especially in the last verse. Great work! (:

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you! I'm pleased that you enjoyed :-)

[New Theory]

Nice rhythm and words are amazing, the flow and construct of the poem are impressive.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you so much for your kind words!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Phoenix,
I love the rhythm and meter to this one. The rhyme is good, too. the third stanza might be a little rough in terms of flow, but the rest of it is beautiful. Thanks for sharing this with us...:)

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you kindly for your sweet review!

[Saddam]

Words on a page
Actors on a stage
Paint on a canvas
The walking dead among us.

Beautifully done with many creativity and imaginstion. A lovely poem.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Thank you so much!