A Metaphor Called Love

I tried to make everything in this poem a metaphor for something in my life. If you can figure them all out.....then you're really smart, and I might just have to give you a cyber cookie! ^_^

Hearts fall from skies at predestined velocities,

And smash into the cruel earth below.

 

Blood gathers in tiny droplets,

Like fresh morning dew on my skin.

 

Effortless lies will replace the truth of pain,

And a harmless smile will stay.

 

Distractions must occupy my mind,

Or else the dark abyss will take me to its depths.

 

 

Alone on a deserted hospital bed,

Hope will die slowly and assuredly.

 

Sitting in my head is where my days are spent,

Yelling for eternity at a deaf companion.

 

A clipboard analysis of everything gone wrong,

Will only make things worse inside.

 

I'm giving up singing songs of happiness,

When it will never lead to my own.

 

The dead cannot warn you of ordeals ahead,

But the living can prove the worth of risk.

 

Falling in Love was not my idea,

For Love is just another metaphor flowing from human nature to pen.

Author's Note

I think I made a couple spelling mistakes...tell me if you see any!

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

WOW! I am totally speechless! This is honestly amazing! XD
I could really relate to what you had written in your poem here, and I felt like you put so much of yourself into this piece, making it a really heartfelt write. I love the idea behind this poem, and I thought that you executed it really well. The imagery was so beautiful, and there wasn't a single stanza in this piece that was weaker than the rest. The details were so focused and I loved how each of the stanzas had underlying stories. The only spelling mistake that I could see was the word which you had spelt 'asuradly' which I'm pretty sure is spelt 'assuredly'.
Other than that, this is a faultless poem! This is one of the best poems I've read in a really long time!
~PaperHearts

[Keli Renee]

I R love this, and therefore, i R love you.
im pretty sure i know what youre talking about in this, cause i can relate 100%
so.....WHERE THE HELL IS MY CYBER COOKIE???
Lulz.

great work, babe.
-Kels

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

wow. killer imagery.

[Sean M. Addams]

nice job on this ... liked the imagery and detail in this alot... an amazing write from you.... nice job on this 100%

[Lauryn Nicole]

I agree with what some of the other people have said. You are a truly amazing writer and I am 100% in love with this!!

[Sincerely, Alex]

B***h, I dont want a cyber cookie, I want a newt.
A fried, hot newt.

:P

This is epicly amazing. Like...I feel so insignificant.
I can relate, as you know.

You are such an amazing writer, and this is proof of that. One of my favorites of yours, dear.

Alex

[Marina]

Woah.

I don't really know how to review this. This is a super deep poem.
I absolutley love it! It couldn't have been written any better.
And I honestly can't stress how much i really like this poem.

XxStaySweet,
Rina