TBA

Venting?

That blissful stinging

Incredibly intriguing  

Running the cool metal over my skin

Enjoying its deadly kiss again

Gliding over my veins

Leaving behind blood-red stains

You ask me if I'm done,

Oh baby, it's just begun

You hurt me with that cheating hoe

So prepare to see me at my lowest low

Bloody tears

Living your nightmares

You don't mean to hurt me?

Too late you've set this free,

Every "I love you exchanged

Another part of me twisted or changed. 

Every hug shared. 

For me to dance with death you've dared.

Every secret hangout sesh

Oh, I think you know the rest...

Going the extra mile to be enough

Unfortunately, it's getting to be too tough

Grades are dipping

My sanity is slipping

My hands, they keep on shaking

My life has ended and I'm not faking...

Reviews

[CHRIS ANDES]

this is great
just love it
=]

[Fiona Nadine]

This is really good. I like how you call the razor a kiss. I totally relate to this. I love the rhythm of it.

[RachelReaper]

You described the razor as a "kiss". I've never heard anyone describe it that way, but the kiss is mingled with your love's pain. This was beautifully sad, and I hope that if this was true that now you are okay.

[That_Girl]

"Leaving behind, blood-red stains" no comma

"Too late you've set this free.." comma after late

"Every "I love you exchanged" end quote after you

Dripping grades? Dipping, maybe?

This is pretty heavy, love. I really enjoyed it though! Wanted to point the above out due to your message. :)

[ForeverNever]

Most appreciated! Maybe not the best to write/type when angry...tends to lead to grammatical errors;]
Thanks again!

[That_Girl]

Hahaha it's all good, hun. :D

[ForeverNever]

But what if some doesn't have nightmares? Would your poetic plan suffer?
Or would you search for new revenge? anywho, nice write....

E.L.

[ForeverNever]

Questions even I asked as writing...again...when I write out of anger, etc. I just let it flow.