With Out You

just a freewright about my ex

Her bodys sweet like cream and cookies

Every time we lust one another

Emotions grow, and grow, and grow, and grow

Now we are two love birds singing the same tune

When ever we're together, the sky is blue

When we are apart, I dream of you

Kissing here, touching there

Must be something in the air

You give me a proud smile

You brighten up my days

You are a huge piece of my life and without you I am incomplete

 

You are a long gone memory

You turned your back on me

Damn ... I miss you Natalie

Reviews

[Who Cares]

I love this, there is not one flaw. Emotion is deep and you use alot of technique. Repetition ( spelling fail?) Third line was intense and made the reader feel what you feel. Imagery was spot on and I love the fact some of it ryhmes and some of it doesn't. This is a great piece and I am proud of you.

[AK]

Nice poem! I like the emotion in it. Very well written!