A Lovers Words

A Lovers Words

A Poem by Forgotten

How could one compare thee to a summers day?
For your radiant beauty is envy of the sun,
Your glorious flowing locks twist and turn in the autumn breeze,
Tranquillity to it's perfection,
Neither by heart or eye can flaw be found.
For no other girl could be found in my heart,
Our fates leading us to intertwine in this heartless world,
For when our eyes meet the spark can be felt,
Just as it courses when our finger lock in perfect harmony,
Yet no word or rhyme could ever match,
The strength of my love for you.
Some say perfection is just a illusion,
Flaws clouded by love and faults locked in haze,
Yet I say let the illusion stand,
For if my heart should want the perfection it sees,
Then let the illusion be mine,
For my love for you is limitless by all means of word.  

© 2012 Forgotten


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Such a loving poem. It is very sweet and beautiful :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Hmmmmmmmmm...........
It is a lovable poem.
Your Girlfriend would be happy to have a lovable boyfriend.
Well I wonder in the third stanza should there be "an illusion" or is it right to use "a illusion". Just a doubt.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


I know I've said this before, but I absolutely love this. It's so sweet, and innocent. Honestly, I could read this a thousand times and still fall in love with it. Lovely piece of work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ohmygosh, this is so beautiful, I feel like this describes my boyfriend's feelings for me perfectly, which I've never really been able to understand.. But this really helps (: this is a stunning poem, full of love and admiration.

One correction: "Some say perfection is just a illusion"
"A" should be "an".

Anyways, beautiful write, great job (:


Posted 11 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was beautiful. It flowed really well!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This is beautiful John, I am in love with the last stanza. It is perfect, each and every word makes it perfect!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautiful poem. I like the feel of old and modern style in the words. Good to have old fashions thoughts in this wild and crazy world. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Forgotten

11 Years Ago

Thank you for your great review, always a pleasure to hear from you
Lovely write! Whoever it's about is a lucky girl :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Forgotten

11 Years Ago

Haha thanks, I'm actually single now though so the girl this was for obviously wasn't so lucky :P
Clear and honest statement of love -
Great write!!
*pat

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Gloucestershire, Stroud, United Kingdom



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