Softly I Slumber

Sonnet

 

 Come,read to me a poem of distant dreams
like soothing sweetness of a forest green
 
Speak to me of azure skies pale blue
paint me glimpses of rainbow's magic hue
perchance a peek of October's splendor
scattered leaves scarlett and gold surrendered
tossed whirling waves from sea dancing ashore
let me climb past pines to mountains and soar
make vague visions clear to me in mine eyes
come,tell of distant dreams I may realize
show me bits of nature,love, I implore
read,please,read me poems of beauty once more
 
While softly I slumber and stars do shine
'Lest I die wishing,a distant dream was mine
 

Reviews

[Morgan Ashire]

I knew the moment this poem's latest contest was over that you had won, my friendly rival. Congratulations. I haven't read your work for some time and I can think of no excuse why I should not have tried. You have a velvet touch with your words. I love the image this piece gave me. Its almost as if a prayer. The punctuation and spacing threw me a bit, but I caught it the second time through. Nothing a simple edit wouldn't fix. Your softness of words seem almost as breath of memories and lost lovers. Its good to read ffrom you again. I hope this finds you well.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I like the piece as a whole...It works wonderfully as a lullaby as someone once pointed out...I tripped up though...on the azure sky, pale blue....but then again, I see the word azure, and Im thinking blue anyways, so it was a bit redundant on that level for me.

And I think you meant bits of nature...not bites....but then again...it could work for the biting cold winds that like to spring up in the night time hours...

As I said though...overall, I really like the peacefulness of this write. Truly good attempt.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

a beautiful poem filled with amazing imagry...

[All faded blue]

Very nice poetry. Soft, and flowing, added to my library.

Thanks for sharing.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very pretty poem, I like it.

[Chiquita]

ADDED TO FAVPORITES!!!!! This is great. It is a lullabye yet whispers a desparate plea for beauty to be realized as though time is known to be short.

[~ Tex]

Another beautiful flow of images. Beautiful work and format.

[Blue Bard]

Nice classic style. The rhyme scheme is fluid and unforced. The subject, traditional but also beautiful. A haunting poem.

[desertraven]

I agree, reads like a lullabye...brilliant!
nicely done.
Sandra♥

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This sounds like a lulliby. The movement of your words and there flow felt soothing and relaxed as if lulling me to sleep and dream blue skies and rainbows. This is so peaceful rested. A simply wonderful read.
Debby

[Jenny Davis]

Longfellow, indeed! This is a feast for the soul and peace for the mind, very nice poem, dear! :)