Softly I Slumber

Sonnet

 

 Come,read to me a poem of distant dreams
like soothing sweetness of a forest green
 
Speak to me of azure skies pale blue
paint me glimpses of rainbow's magic hue
perchance a peek of October's splendor
scattered leaves scarlett and gold surrendered
tossed whirling waves from sea dancing ashore
let me climb past pines to mountains and soar
make vague visions clear to me in mine eyes
come,tell of distant dreams I may realize
show me bits of nature,love, I implore
read,please,read me poems of beauty once more
 
While softly I slumber and stars do shine
'Lest I die wishing,a distant dream was mine
 

Reviews

[Morgan Ashire]

I knew the moment this poem's latest contest was over that you had won, my friendly rival. Congratulations. I haven't read your work for some time and I can think of no excuse why I should not have tried. You have a velvet touch with your words. I love the image this piece gave me. Its almost as if a prayer. The punctuation and spacing threw me a bit, but I caught it the second time through. Nothing a simple edit wouldn't fix. Your softness of words seem almost as breath of memories and lost lovers. Its good to read ffrom you again. I hope this finds you well.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wonderful poem Good imagery. Great Write.

[Amor-de-angel]

This is so good. A beautiful sonnet,well done.

[Amund Schofield]

Oh I almost teared up. I'm not sure how to do this, but make it more sad at the end.

[Terrell A. Pullen]

Oh My God that was so nice...Screw it!....I'm going to be real and tell the honest truth. This here was beautiful!

Oh my it put so many visions in my mind. I now want to learn how to write sonnets, I am so going to start practicing on them!

You have made my day with this on my friend!

GREAT WRITE!!!

[Emily B]

This is beautiful. It reminds me of a Longfellow poem that I know. So lovely and serene.