On Scarlet Wings

sonnet

On Scarlet Wings^

  

In the twilight of life's last tired breath
whereupon our soul prepares for the flight
it's fire and wings that fly us home,yes
a Phoenix rises renewed toward new light
On Scarlet Wings,our spirit soars on high
leaving ashes of mortal death behind
giving up the ghost, when life's course runs dry
'Alas, beauty of peace our soul doth find
No more to suffer Earth's prolonged decree
of life's daily struggles from dawn to dusk
grinding the distance to the ninth degree
a constant state of flux,as live we must

It's a fire and wings that fly us home
On Scarlet Wings,once life's seeds have been sown

 

Reviews

[Mason]

This is a very powerful poem. It has a unique take on the phoenix in symbolism of life and death that I really enjoy. My personal favorite lines, especially when compared, were "No more to suffer Earth's prolonged decree" and "It's a fire and wings that fly us home" that suggest something different than what a phoenix is usually for, which is not just death but most importantly resurrection. Most would interpret the use of a phoenix as returning to life, but you seem to imply that rebirth isn't in mortal life, but in some version of the afterlife that you call "home." That has a bit of a Christianity vibe to it, though I do not know your personal beliefs. Anyway, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for submitting.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much;

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Beautiful and up lifting.. rising above our troubles to find the strength to fight what tries to hold us down... Let your voice be strong and fight on.

[Emily B]

Lovely, lovely, I so love the idea of the phoenix rising from the ashes.

[Dead Angel]

very beautifully written. well done! :)

[T.k. Sutter]

A beautiful piece of writing - full of wisdom and truth. I loved this!

[Greg the Bard]

Sounds words with great meaning. I love the flow of sonets and this is a good one. It is straight to the point in a round about way. Good stuff.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

i agree, this is a beautiful piece of writing... loved it

[Harlequin]

Great piece, so beautifully written.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is quite beautiful. I like the use of the color scarlet here. Lovely piece in its simplicity and subtlety but it speaks about so much in so few words. Very nice. Thanks for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Heart Of A Wolf]

Very good poem here. I love the description of scarlet wings and how we rise up as a pheniox. We do rise up much like that.

[E. M. Murren]

This is a beautiful work. Sonnets are so difficult for me. I am always impressed when someone is good at them like you obviously are. Well done.