`and there he was`

He sauntered across the dancefloor
under the strobe lights in his electric

blue tailor made suit.
so fine looking, make no mistake
about it, he was the image of my desire.

 His colorful view had a strange
effect on me, stirring my emotions

into a frenzy frame of mind.

 As he approached the bar where I was

indulging my fifth gin and tonic,

yes,I had reached my limit.

 With a drunken smile and timid-eye wink

I said, you're bad, bad to the bone.

 

 

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

I could see in this piece you knew your priority's
Good job.

[Christian Walters]

Aren't these words great: 'A frenzy frame of mind.' I can feel the excitement.

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

theres a great story here. Wonderful write.

dave

[Fran Marie]

THanks for reading

[TL Boehm]

lol I found myself giggling at this one - at the end. I really like this one...of course I don't recommend getting drunk in a bar, but I found it light hearted.

[Everett DeValle]

Nice, reminds me of me when I become a bar fly with friends. I truly enjoyed this write. ~Ev

[T. L. O'Neal]

Made me think of the disco days back in the 70's, opps, showing my age now. Good write Fran. T

[Brette Medb]

This was great! I could picture the crowd parting allow the man who just so happens to be oh so smooth sauntering up to the bar in his electric blue suit. Great write.

Brette

[Ladysue]

Fran, this made me chuckle. I enjoyed it. Nicely descriptive. Well penned.

[George Love]

LOL!!! Great description here! Love it!