Line

Senryu

 

I'm an unused line

caught between your choice of words

erased from your mind

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

This a powerful piece as it caused me to stop and think about things around me and the world as whole. The pure conveying of some thing more than what is merely stated as we see lines as the meaning of everything and nothing. We can see the depth of a souls perspective being unraveled before our very eyes and what truth have we learned to knowing something of the everything that comes together to make each of us whole and as individual parts of a larger picture of the world.


Great Job!!!!!!

[Yvonne Heidt]

Wonderful job with this! What an analogy - I'm impressed :)

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

short piece, and it still grabbed my attention.


great write

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

Fourteen words was all it took for you to chain my attention and set my imagination free. I loved this, Fran, well done.

Dave

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very nicely done. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, Fran, this succinct write could keep me thinking for days! Absolutely wonderful! Lydia

[Fran Marie]

Thanks

[Spoken]

This is a great senryu. A forgotten line caste out by the writer, deemed not suitable enough for their piece. Wonderful.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

That is so irritating....to want to write something, to know what you want to say....then gone....gone forever...

I like this piece...short, sweet, and packs a heavy lesson!

[George Love]

Oh, so slick. Read between the lines! So simple, yet so many fail to see it, or at least I hope that's what you meant by this. I could be wrong, but it won't be the first time!