Missing Angel

A Collaboration Write by Fran Marie and David L.Price

 

    
Snow skirts another new day
still my mind envisions pink.
Warm and sunny dreams of you stay

where I am its dark as night
I slumber yet still I think
I long to see and hold you tight

Chilled weather holds it's grip
and nips my cheek, yet I think
of the enticing warmth of your lips

Your touch stimulates electrical synapses
I feel your lips and want to drink
I see our life in brilliant flashes

Icy tree limbs bend in deep freeze harm
but my heart is feeling insync,
knowing I'll soon be in your arms

You can’t hear but I scream to be heard
Perhaps a telepathic link
Then you’d know I hear your words

Blustery winds breathe without care
yet my soul inhales your love's drink
and weary woes do ease when you're here 

The blustery winds won’t take me away
My resolve to stay won’t bend or kink
I’m coming home, your love it lights the way. 

 

Author's Note

Fran wrote Stanzas 1,3,5,7
Dave wrote Stanzas 2,4,6,8

Reviews

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

This is another example that two riters can blend their thoughts and imagination to create one literary work of art. It doesn't always come together so easy I assure you but Fran is a fabulous writer and sometimes when I read her work I think, or maybe it is I want to believe, we think alike. i love the voice of the female charcter in this. It begs of having something that was taken away, the warmth of her love. When I wrote the male voice for this piece I wanted to echo that sentiment but from the stand point that he can't make it back. That hes right there but at the same time a world away. He can hear her and sense her touch but can't see her, talk or move to her. The male voice in this is in a coma desperately trying to find away back to his love.

I don't know if everyone can pick that out of the words but there it is.

I loved doing this piece. Fran is a truely wonderful talent.

Dave

[Dezaraye]

This is a wonderful collaboration! The two of you did a fantastic job. It's so romantic and beautiful.

[Blue Bard]

Let's get it on...(Ah Marvin Gaye). I feel the heat, the passion, the uh collaboration. Your voices blend well. Think I need a cold shower.

[James Mayfield]

I think this was a very well done collaboration. I don't even see the need to divide the stanzas by male and female. I think they flowed quite well together simply as one lover to another. Very well done.

[Bear]

Good stuff!!! By both of the authors.
Bear

[Legion]

Light house of love. :)

[Gandré]

Oh this was tricky pretty creative. the skillful manipulation of imaginery to deepen the meaning the playful style - fantastic.

[A.J. Smith]

What a cool concept, and so well executed! I wonder if, perhaps, there is a way to structure/present this poem so the reader more easily grasps that this is, in fact, an exchange between two lovers, stanza respoding to stanza?

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

A captivating piece, you two did a great collabration! Nicely done, guys!


Great Write,
Rayne

[All faded blue]

Quite interesting. It is obvious you two can pair well together on writing. More?

[Floating on the feather..]

This is so beautiful.... The imagery, the flow, the rhythm... very captivating.

Good job.
Shinjini