`Deep Within`

IF I could have access to your mind
deep within and beyond the darkness
you secretly disguise~ I would delve
right into your soul,to discover if only
the shadows of your thoughts and the
secrets which they hold
 
and if I could plant thoughts in your head
you would know how deeply I love you
and how you hold me in the palm of your hand.
You could glimpse into my soul,
and handle gingerly the heart I give to you
as I succumb under your complete control
 
Even from a distance dear
you captured the very core of me
and my every sense comes rushing forth
when you draw near
and I wanting to fall into your arms
knowing you'll give your heart to share
 
Perhaps we'll toast a glass of love's
champagne and seal it with a kiss
exploring moments beneath the dancing stars
sharing moonlight  bliss
making each passion ours
doing what we wish
 
If only for a day, a night
you give me your tender touch
Love is such a gentle thing
 in return~ I'll give you twice as much
 
We could entertain each other's thoughts
with one mind on love so true
If I could plant thoughts in your head
you would know how much I love, being in love with you

 

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a deeply beautiful poem that has all the magical and mythical sentiments of love. I love the word choices for this poem and it reads more like a story. the imagery playing in my mind was serene and romantic.

[funeralmoon]

this one was very good, great flow.

[holly]

Fran, your poem makes me wish I was young enough to love like this. Hugs to you.

[Brianna Brie]

and if I could plant thoughts in your head
you would know how deeply I love you
and how you hold me in the palm of your hand.
You could glimpse into my soul,
and handle gingerly the heart I give to you
as I succumb under your complete control

What a beautiful sentiment. For a couple to know what is felt within each others heart and mind. Stunning write.

[deeps]

Fran, This is simply stunning and ever so wonderful.
This has to be one of my favorites from you.
This is remarkable.

[Sasavet]

A perfect portrait of love, the beauty, the tranquility and the hopefulness. This is truly beautiful. I'm not particularly a fan of rhyming but it worked quite well in this :) All I'd say is maybe watch repetition of words, but it really is lovely :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is one of your best... wanting to give it all to the one you love including letting them see themselves through your eyes... Really love it.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Now this is supreme!! Love the flow immensely.. and the contents.. totally dreamy! The passion contained is full of fire and such a notion of planting thoughts instead of using a love potion.. makes it so unique! Thank you so much for sharing.. going to favorites for inspiration! =)

[Sheila Kline]

Ooooh how beautiful are your words of in this exquisite write of love! It is so very touching, and gentle, yet has much passion in it.
I especially like the phrase about..."we'll toast a glass of love's champagne"!!
I am marking this as a favorite!

[Gandré]

and how you hold me in the palm of your hand.
You could glimpse into my soul,
and handle gingerly the heart I give to you--------this was my favorite part. You make my morning full of hope, heartfulness and romantic desire. I love your being in love in this poem!