Water in my lungs...

Sometimes the best way to deal with a hurt heart is to write down your feelings...

Should I stay or should I go…

Can she see, she hurts me thou?

Why is it that, I can’t let go…

Is the love gone? I don’t know…

 

I am here, yet she can’t see…

Confused I am, in pain I be.

I need her warmth, in this cold vast sea.

Why does she, do this to me?

 

I still have Hope to be one, one day.

I hang from this rope and continue to pray.

 

Should I stay or just let go…

Can she see? She hurts my soul.

Why won’t I just let go!

Love is not gone within me, this I know.

 

I stand here, with her ignoring me.

Lost and hurt, confused makes we.

Drowning I sink, to the bottom of the sea.

Why does she do nothing to save...

 

To late… Cold empty and silent…

 

Alone in darkness…

 

Author's Note

Ignore grammar and spelling... I would just love feedback on the work...

thanks!

Reviews

[Destiny]

I understand perfectly. Sometimes it helps to mp everything out in your mind so you can see it. That what a lot of my poetry is for me...

But as for your poem I think it captured that critical moment when we're trying to figure out exactly what's going on and then suddenly the pieces come together and you realize there isn't anything else you can do. It's tough to have to ride out the end of a bad break up, and I think this poem captured the beginning of that journey.
Thanx for writing.
♥Destiny♥

[darkgurl]

Should I stay or just let go�
Can she see? She hurts my soul.
Why won't I just let go!
Love is not gone within me, this I know

This is a very powerful emotion write, well written....Kim

[Wycked]

I really like this i can feel the struggle within you ....so many of us have been here. You love and care for someone and at what point to you say enough is enough. Its so hard sometimes to let go and say Im done. Great Job of articulating the exact feelings.

[julian3]

The depth of emotion and the dark angst of the moments when our thoughts and beliefs about 'love' are challenged - these things are captured nicely in this work. Well done.

[Marianne]

It is so sweet and dark. It is impressive indeed!

[Morgan A Lynch]

this is a very good write.. a ton of emotion with in it..

thank you for sharing

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I liked it. It read like a song, I could see this in a song form. Very sad, but when you want someone back so badly, this is exactly how it feels. i've been there many times before!I like this piece. thank you for sharing.

kena