Alive

The tips of my fingers grew cold.
Why won’t someone warm them up?
No one was ever their to cheer me up.
I was so lonely with no meaning no purpose.
Wandering up a stair case never reaching an end.
When I met you all of that changed.
Your warmth surrounded me.
I did not feel lonely any more.
I was now alive and I owe it all to you.

Now only if this was true.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

"No one was ever their to cheer me up."
Their should be there. Don't worry, I used to get their, They're, and there mixed up alot too ^^ You'll get it with enough prectice.
Very lovely poem, I love how it turned out and became a happy ending.
Well done!

[CHRIS ANDES]

the emotion was presented in the simplest way
yet beautifully read
=]

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

The last line punched me in the stomach! Until the last line I was so happy; the words just filled my heart with joy.
"Now only if this was true."
That's so sad, it makes me want to hold my boyfriend tight

[SuicidePact.]

AMAZING!!!

[deepblue04]

wow, it's nice to meet someone that enjoys you for you, and was the last line a plot twist, sweet, I like open ending writings

[_]

At first I was like you lucky b*****d! You get have that!!!! But then I read the last line and has like *hugs* lol. Great poem though, :D

[Rika]

Thanks very much jamilet!

[KT]

Very simple, yet powerful. Awesome write! :)

[The Flame of the Knight]

Hm. Good.. interesting piece. I hope things get better.

[RachelReaper]

aw, and I thought you were going to get better.... oh, well, nice poem anyways, though it did make me really sad.

[Ella]

This is so beautiful. Awh you're going to make me cry. I hope this special girl realizes how lucky she is, and if you haven't found her yet, get your butt moving! ;)

[Rika]

Thanks, i guss ill try

[Ella]

Good idea :)